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summer noon
a cat lies on its back -
mice escape
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the cat
leaps on a chameleon -
sudden rain
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Author notes
A true scene I observed from my kitchen window day before yesterday. We have plenty of chameleons in this area and few days back, we even had one inside our ground floor bathroom. It was quite a nightmare dealing with the little monster! I thought the cat wanted to eat the chameleon(I think it does, but not sure), because the chameleon as a rule changes colours when it senses danger in the surrounding area of where it is..It happened when my maid was throwing water on it in the bathroom in the attempt to make it run out of the window from where it had entered, but, it didnt go. It just kept hiding behind the bucket, etc.. Likewise, this chameleon too sensed danger from the cat and in its attempt to flee, changed colours and then took off before the cat could do anything..
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A contest entry
- The Cat Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended July 3, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Just coming back around, Char, and I really like the revision you've made in the second of these haiku. Not only the changing of the chameleon's color but the darkening skies before a sudden rain seems to draw both nature itself and cat nature closer in by this edit.
Thanks again for the entry!
Jo -
the cat leaps
on a chameleon changing colours -
sudden rain
Hi Char
This made me smile, I have watched cats in Greece catching lizards. In the UK my cat mainly catches birds, mice and the odd frog (he doesn't eat the frogs and somehow they survive)
There is a great 'ku moment in this but maybe line 2 is a little heavy - most people know chameleons change colours. Perhaps 'changing colours' is redundant here?
For alliteration
how about
the cat
catches a chameleon -
sudden rain
All the best
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Hi Alan! Loved your precious suggestions and comments. Thank you! I was thinking over L2 myself. Glad you too told me. I've made some changes there. Loved your version of it too.
Char
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I love the unique scenes of your haiku, Char. Though I've had no cat/chameleon experience, I did have a cat once that fished newts and those little miniature frogs from the aquarium. She'd just bury them in the kitchen mat to be discovered, and the newts and frogs were none the worse for the experience.
Really enjoyed the read and the scenes you've created by these haiku, and thank you so much for this entry to the contest!
Jo
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Glad you love 'em, Jo! Have a haiku filled day
Charishma
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This is a lovely duet of haiku, that tell such an interesting story! I just love the second one, with the chameleon changing colors!
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Thanks a million, dear friend!!
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I'm curious to know the general region you live in where there's so many chameleons! I like this write! It's a bit comical and amazing<3
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I live in the city of Pune, in India. We moved here 2 months and 2 days back :-) It is an independent bungalow and we have no neighbours..its pretty quiet here right now and that is what I love most about it - perfect for Zen meditation. Thanks for your comments!
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