The bonfire crackles, burning hot
The wood, ablaze, emits a fume
Beside the flame we kneel and squat
Inhaling summery perfume
The ocean's waves are rolling in
The salt makes hazy seaside air
As we were walking, we had been
Noticing saliferous flair
There are yellow blossoms nigh
Honeysuckle buds and grows
A sweet aroma blows right by
To catch an unsuspecting nose
At picnics, the highlight is fruit
Like strawberries and honeydew
The taste is sweet, air follows suit
For fragrance did that air imbue
When the backyard grows too long
A trimming might well be in store
That smell the lawn gives off is strong
But somehow leaves you wanting more
The sun is at its greatest height
Lay on the beach with your eyes shut
Use suntan lotion, cool and white
A plus, it smells of coconut
Oh, the smells of the summer breeze.
A contest entry
- Quickie - "Smells of the Summer Breeze" by Ryno.
300 points, ended June 16, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Summer Smiles by smilingshadow.
500 points, ended July 6, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Raneika's Birthday Bash and Anything Goes Contest! (STILL OPEN!!!!!!!!!!!) by Ms Raneika.
436 points, ended July 17, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Snapshots of Summer by Star Shine.
600 points, ended August 3, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This covers the spectrum of day and night and all the savory smells and pleasures of a summer experience. Wonderful. Thanks for your entry.
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This poem just really had me indulge and your every word...so smooth...thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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such a descriptive piece i like each verse it almost touches on every sense of sight smell and hearing...the pictures painted so clear in the mind..such a rhythmic and graceful piece of work...i love the verse " at picnics, the highlight is fruit..." such a lovely piece thankyou for entering...best wishes and good luck
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The meter is almost perfect and the rhyme is flawless. The imagery I get from the vocabulary you use is amazing(the mix of common,everyday language with higher-level vocabulary). I could almost hear the sigh right befor the last line.
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Love this verse; while I'm not a big fan of free-rhyming poetry; I love what you do with yours in still giving structures and really using stanzas what they are meant for. Good work with the prompt. Thanks for the entry.
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Thanks for the comment, Ryan, I'm glad you liked it.
It was an honor to write for your contest.
<33 Christine
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'There are yellow blossoms nigh
Honeysuckle buds and grows
A sweet aroma blows right by
To catch an unsuspecting nose'
i loved this stanza... it reminds me of those scents that unexpectantly i breathe in as i pass by the jasmine or honeysuckle... and nothing beats the smell of being at the ocean... nothing!
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Oh, I know. When we drive down to the shore, I roll the window down. I love the smell of salt air.
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