Champagne sentiments
Nature can't reassure us
that the sun will rise.
Of course, yesterday
someone spilled pink lemonade
on the horizon.
And we warmed ourselves
hopeful, some childlike god's
Sherbert fingerpaints.
Reality falls
fire fleeing deception
during night's black reign.
A contest entry
- Form Poetry -- Round Two. Invite Only. by Porcelain Princess.
300 points, ended July 1, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrite quickie contest # 2 by Kari.
390 points, ended January 18, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow
this one shone for me~ i like it. usually when i read haiku's they're usually strictly nature poems... so it was a nice read. great pictures struck into my head and knocked me over. and it's all your fault~
good luck
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Amazing.
You have a gift for imagery and really painting a picture in a reader's head with your word choice.
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Thank you much. I struggled with the last stanza, because I was just out of inspiration.
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Your form - A haiku chain of at least four stanzas.
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0.o oh dear.... ok....
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