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Forget the hallelujah

There’s not a prayer in this world that can save you
Now I’m losing the memories what more can I do
You took my heart and threw it away but I grew strong
I let my heart love someone again so I moved along

Yet every time I see your face it takes me back to the place
Where we shared our very last embrace
I realise there is nothing left for me to hold on to
There is no longer a feeling that I hold that is true

Now you are gone I don’t know why I sleep
And you are not the one that I meet in my dreams
For there is a heart now that I can trust to keep
Me from the nightmares and the blood curdling screams
So all the angels in the night come and they say to me
Forget the hallelujah you were told by thee

Love is something that taught what to believe
When it was right to smile and when it was right to grieve
Now I have found a love that will not pretend
To take my heart and then let it descend

To a heaven that only exists in your mind
Now I will not let the illusion make me blind
For the power it once had is now just a memory
That can only survive though the heart of me

Now you are gone I don’t know why I sleep
And you are not the one that I meet in my dreams
For there is a heart now that I can trust to keep
Me from the nightmares and the blood curdling screams
So all the angels in the night come and they say to me
Forget the hallelujah you were told by thee

Hallelujah is the word forever upon my lips
The sound trapped inside of my kiss
Hallelujah is the feeling that I hold from the past
For it was a beauty that will always last

Now you are gone I don’t know why I sleep
And you are not the one that I meet in my dreams
For there is a heart now that I can trust to keep
Me from the nightmares and the blood curdling screams
So all the angels in the night come and they say to me
Forget the hallelujah you were told by thee

Author notes

Love is not a victory march, it's a cold and
it's a broken hallelujah


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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    i agree this held so much truth
    it actually is because you end up in more tears and pain than you started of with
    this was so deep with emotions and just everyothing
    it just seemed so true
    i found i was noddig the whole way through
    a wonderful write
    thankyou and best of luck.


  • black lagoon x
    August 5, 2007
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    The truth

    i know,it is true.love is cold and a broken hallelujah.Thank you for entering a poem with such deep powerful emotion.i know myself how hard it is to move on.


    -Y.W. xx

  • Meyeryakov
    July 27, 2007

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    I'm speechless. Hands down, flawless.


  • forbidden-colour
    July 10, 2007

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    The song from Shrek?
    Man.... Love that movie.

    Nice write hun!
    Descriptive.. Been there.
    Mwahs!

    Lullaby.x.

    Good luck, and thank you for entering!


  • oh willoughby
    July 5, 2007
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    awww, very good poem
    and good luck in this contest!


  • LucyLightning
    July 3, 2007
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    =]] awesome possum! loveeee. Good luck in the contest!


  • AngelEyes13
    June 23, 2007
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    I love this poem. I wish I could say the same, that I've moved on. But it's just really hard to do. Thank you soo much for entering my contest.


  • Beating gold member
    June 17, 2007

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    As my co-host said - I really like the repeating part. It makes the whole piece so strong.
    One thing I was wondering about. In the line:
    "That can only survive though the heart of me"
    don't you mean "through"? Or is it really "though"?


  • JulietteArielle
    June 17, 2007

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    Powerful emotions. The flow is good I just think it'd be better with shorter lines. I love the repeating parts.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Dreams27
    June 16, 2007
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    wow!! this is beautiful!! so wonderfully written!! i love this poem!! it flows well from start to finish and the rhyme works well..not forced, always a bonus! i really did enjoy this poem!!! emotion is expressed well!! thank you very much for entering this!! i wish you luck!! take care, Sam (Dreams27) xxx

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