They were on the tip of my tongue
those words that I couldn't say.
If only I'd had the courage to talk
you wouldn't have walked away.
But alas I said nothing
of these feelings I carry.
All alone there I stood
feeling quite contrary.
You poured out your heart,
told me you believed
a soulmate in me you found,
I should have been relieved.
Your voice is just a memory
in the silence that remains.
Hope faded from your eyes that day
the only thing left was pain.
I should have told you that I love you,
I should have told you when I fell,
You deserve that and more
because even heroes need an angel.
Author notes
Option 2
A contest entry
- Options--Please Enter by LunaAmara.
600 points, ended September 3, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I appreciate this
Well expressed and moving.
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this is great--
a great write and i like the rhyme scheme!
good luck -
What a sad write but wonderfully put. Great job
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So heartfelt and emotional write you have penned here. Great rhythm, rhyme and flow in these lines. Sensational silver award as well. Regrets, sounds as if you have a few, well expressed, easy to read and understand as well.
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loved the flow of caring and love you shared, for we fail to say what we feel to others, and love should and must be shared. nice job.
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I love this poem. It totally sums up the wistful regret that, I think, so many of us feel. I especially liked the closing stanza; that was perfect.
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wow!
Honestly, what more can you say to something so beautiful? I didn't see this poem from the eyes of the person who should have said the words, I saw it from the eyes of the person they should have been said to.
"Hope faded from your eyes that day
the only thing left was pain"
That spoke volumes to me.
Well written, and well deserving of your trophy
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This was beautiful!!!
You have no idea how this has affected me
Just the other day I told this woman how I felt...she said she enjoyed my company....now I sit here in tears, wishing so badly she feels the way you do in this poem.
I can only pray..that one day she wil realized that my love is pure, undying and loyal
That if she hides these feelings deep down side, maybe one day she'll have the courage to call and tell me.
Not trying to make you feel guilty...but you'll never know how it feels to love and not have that love returned...She was more than just my friend...She has to be...because otherwise I am just a fool.
I thankyou though...cause you gave me a little piece of hope through your words
And I suggest...if there's anyway you can find your love...that you swallow your fear and tell them...cause they sure did when they told you.
Trust me when I say...no matter what their situation is now...that it will be the happiest day of their life...even if you two can't be together for some reason....at least they will know that they weren't a complete fool!
Im sorry going off here
really....really touched me!!!
Yours truely...."Complete Fool"
Much Love!
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WOW!!
Excellent write, very emotional..I melt away with reading it..
Thanks alot for entering my contest & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
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Breath taking!
"Your voice is just a memory
in the silence that remains.
Hope faded from your eyes that day
the only thing left was pain."
Beautiful! Oh I just love this piece! I'm definitely going to bookmark it. It's just so poetic and beautiful, and I really relate to it!
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I found this in shamelessly promo, and I'm glad I did. This is a really great write and I could see your words play out before me. Nice write.
whisper
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This was emotionally impacting and just b e a u t i f ul !! Seems to me it commanded a slow but rythmic read. The message is clear nad you just grabbed us from the beginning and held on tight! Just beautiful
~tia
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Okay I'm bawling...
Need some author notes on this one... leaves me pondering and wondering... Beautifully written for someone special to you... I'm happy to see that you are writing again. Bless you Nik... heros know their angels regardless if they are "appearant" or not...
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