with knife in one hand
and gun in the other
this is where you've
lead me to mother.
don't say you want things
to be alright..i'd
sooner slice my throat
than believe you twice.
slowly i bring the knife
to my flesh...oh please..
tell me mother..how many
gashes you do wish???
A contest entry
- Darkness, Let Me See Your Darkness by AshesFromFire.
700 points, ended July 21, 2007, 79 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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absolutely gorgeously written.. beautiful! :)
i likled this piece
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nice! I have a similar poem called have I made you proud. Wow, what our mothers can do to us *shaking head slowly*
You did a nice job of capturing emotion in this poem!
Very nice rhyme and flow!
All in all you did an exalent job!
Great job!
Good luck! -
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aint it a shame???
a shame how someone who you should always be able to trust to love and care for us can end up treating us like crap,uh?? thank you for your nice words and comments..sadly writing about her(my mom) is what helps me
to deal with all the pain..once again thank you!!!
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