I cant go on like this
Its too much
I live in an air lock
Things change so fast
Do we move
Everythings standing still
I see my future dressed as my savior
He's wearing a space dye vest
Enigmas surround me
They wont leave me
He's still wearing that space dye vest
Metropolis imploding
Life's unfolding
Right before my eyes
Moving through space and time
I pass judgments
Blind to everything
Mocking me, they stare and they laugh
Judging my every move
A contest entry
- Anything as long as it is good by Swan song.
750 points, ended July 14, 2007, 48 entries
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1100 points, ended July 20, 2007, 12 entries
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375 points, ended August 15, 2007, 132 entries
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comments from the peanut gallery
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This was wow!!
I loved the rythm and flow of this piece.
Indeed a good one. I like it the way it wouldnt change anything. Then again thats my own opinion
Thanks for sharing you poet.
Tory
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line 10 you can probably add alone to the end of the line. other than that it seems perfect free write!
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