O n thorny path I’ve walked some painful mile
N ot knowing where to turn, devoid of goal
E nchanting seemed some ways for thirsty soul
N ight’s haunting voice with promise to beguile
E ntrancing with much passion, pleasure-quest
S educing song of substance, vapoured mind
S urrendered to desire of any kind
O h how my wilting soul would search for rest
N o hope for light of day in distant reach
E cstatic highs soon followed by despair
N irvana, come to save me from this hell
E nlighten numbing darkness through your speech
S oft silence was the answer to my prayer
S weet stillness freed the pearl within the shell
Author notes
OPTION 1 : ONENESS
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Excellent use of form and wonderful journey! Thank-you for taking the time to enter my contest and also good luck!
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Excellent usage of form and message! Again, you have shown a side that is deep and graceful. I love the imagery of meditation and peace with oneself I found here. Blue
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Very Well Done
This is very well done. I loved every word of this. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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This is a very beautiful sonnet, and the acrostic is an added complexity that you handle gracefully. Your imagery and metaphors are lovely. Best wishes!
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Acrostic Sonnets just don't get much better than this, both in craft and in content. A truly wonderful work that was a delight to read. Best of luck in the contest with this beautiful poem.
David Michaels
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This was a beautiful poem in an intricate form. Sometimes I find acrostics to be forced, but your sonnet flowed effortlessly. This is a touching love story of a fragile heart who finds repose. There is one misspelling "ecstatic". Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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This is wonderful Marion!
So creatively done. A sonnet and double acrostic combined...amazing!
Good luck in the contests.
I am sure you will do well.
Harrisham Minhas
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Wow!
This is a brilliant Petrarchan Sonnet, I love this form A combined repeated acrostic too, this is amazing sis You've even accomplished a perfect volta. The rhyme is flawless and the content rich indeed. This should get you a trophy for sure, it's poetic perfection and a masterpiece by all standards. Very well done with this and thank you for sharing. Love you always. Laura 
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