the moonlight is fine
just jump on in
fall into the dark
hold on as i grab your arm
the last thing i look in is your eyes
and yet i feel safe
is that all there is
or has my mind played tricks
i wonder if its true what they say
and what they say isnt always right
so whats gonna happen
can i ask or will you tell
its breath taking and right
at all the wrong times
its hard to believe this
is what its like to have nothing
or is the sparkle in your eyes
becuase of what i said im not sure
bit by bit i understand
and its what i believe
can i tell you a secret
it has so many meanings
but so many ends
the flower in the field
it shows just what im about
the lone thing that stands
but im proud of where its gone
my heart just cant speak
if it could i would never die
but the pain i hold inside
has taken its toll
oh well i suppose
i have my end too
my tragedy is forgiven
but nobody will forget
its a scar that bears a name
and that im happy to show
its a sign of flaws
but failing is half the fun
when you touch my arm what do you feel
that pulse that brings me life
the beat of the world in all its gold
i cant explain
but trust me when i say its right
my lips could explain a million things
without having a word to say
but maybe its wrong what you think
yet i dont care because
what i know isnt always there
and the time we spoke has to end
its a long lost love
with consequence
but i will risk it for you
for one minute more
time can fade
but we will stand
hearts locked in place
for all of forever
people pass
but i will stay
A contest entry
- To find ugly meanings in beautiful things is to be corrupt without being charming -Oscar Wilde by Aesthete.
700 points, ended June 18, 2007, 14 entries
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it remainds of a situation i've been through good work...
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This poem is very personal sounding. It does a decent job of involving the reader within the work. It seems to be immature though, or rather just underdeveloped in style. That’s fine though, judging from your voice you are still quite young. Keep writing and thanks for entering.
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Wow. This is some poem that you have here. It seems like you have a whole lot to say in it. I probably wouldn't have realized that they were lyrics unless I saw them catergorized that way but I never read lyrics right. lol It sounds to me like you're talking to someone who means something too you. Like maybe you're trying to explain who you are inside and you don't feel like they really understand. I don't know if I'm way off or not but that's what it seemed like to me.
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thank you
i put these under lyrics, because to me, they are the lyrics of my soul, this doesnt even necessarily have a rythm, but i could sing it if i tried and make it come out right to me. so im sorry that you think you didnt read it right
but i appreciate you explaining what you think, your way off but right on target at the same time, i prefer to write in a style so that everyone can find their own personal meaning and inspiration behind my work, what you think is hate, others may think is love, but to me this song is being afraid of telling someone how i feel and not doing it, to your its actually trying to explain how you feel to a person. i like it that way too, it intruiges me to what people think. so thank you so much for reading my work and commenting on it! it means a lot to me to get feedback
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aaaawwww this sound so special
and sweet
and sincere
i hold this one close to my heart
i love it so much
-suicidal revenge-
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