Left Behind - Rondeau by freespirit51 at All poetry

My hope still reigns, but nothings right

I wonder though the pain at night

Guilty of tears shed in many ways

Left with my soul and heart ablaze

….Love and joy now missing from sight

Lonely the storm absent of light

Bruised, broken in endless fight

Excessive agony is this phase

….My hope still reigns

Dismal laughter fills me tonight

Wish you would only hug me tight

My heart inflamed and hope shall raise

Blessings now to fulfill my days

….My hope still reigns

Author notes

Option #7-Left Behind

Option #9-Wordbank: pain, agony, dismal, inflamed, bruised, excessive, soul, night, lonely, light, guilty, storm, blessings, tears,, laughter.

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Willowhaunt
September 30, 2007

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Some of the lines seemed to be awkwardly worded, but other than that it was a very descriptive, visual poem and I enjoyed the form. I've never read a Rondeau before. Very well written.

Keep Quilling,
Whiskey
The Reapers Angel
August 13, 2007

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This is a very lovely Rondeau, my favorite lines are:
"Guilty of tears shed in many ways
Left with my soul and heart ablaze"
I absolutely love your verbiage and imagery in this poem, great job on this and with the word bank.
Puppydog
July 14, 2007

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SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
Even in our darkest moments there is always that faint light, that faith and hope that what was once will come again.
Hebz
June 16, 2007

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Brilliant piece..so expressive!!

Thanks alot for entering my contest & Best of Luck

GloriousGift
Heba
- freespirit51
  June 16, 2007
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  Thanks for your terrific comment. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Whispering Wind
June 15, 2007

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BEAUTIFULLY SAD

Just beautiful! please pass the tissues tears are flowing*hug* your words sure move the heart and leaves a since of such loss for the reader...feel like you need a hug*hug*

BLESSINGS and LOVE

for you my sweet LITTLE WIND
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks so much my sweet sister for your kind words. I am glad it touched you. I thought I would try to use the wordbank in a poetry form just for the challenge of it. And thanks for the hugs I can always use your hugs.
arafura
June 15, 2007

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You used the wordbank to build a very comendable work here poet! It reads very well!

Well done!
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks so much for your kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed them.
Griswold
June 15, 2007
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Very nicely done, an eclectic bunch of words to work with and you pulled it off admirably...Scott
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks for the kind comment. I am glad you enjoyed the piece. It was an interesting words bank and I just had to try it.
Peteskid
June 15, 2007

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a creative word bank
prompts used very well to produce a poem with a nice narration and a good deal of expression, very nicely done...PK
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks for the great review, glad you enjoyed it and hope to hear more from you,.
Soulful Woman
June 14, 2007

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This was incredibly written...I haven't seen you around for awhile and was happy to see this on the featured list. I just loved it..
Soulful Woman
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks soulful for your wonderful words. I have been around and have posted several interesting pieces..I think in the past few weeks. Glad to know your watching and still reading.
smntha.
June 14, 2007

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WOW!!! I loved this. It was a really deep and beautiful piece and I can relate to this. Very impressive write. The picture completes it all. Great job! Good luck!!!
- freespirit51
  June 15, 2007
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  Thanks for the great comment. I am glad you enjoyed it.