our fingers entwined as we show that we care
our hearts next in line only if we dare
the touch i feel is more than you
it reminds me of every thing weve been through
the touch of your hand tells me everything
and people remind us of how we seem to cling
but that doesnt change how i feel
because our hands show its real
A contest entry
- Hands by theredcatjazzoflove.
650 points, ended June 15, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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deep profound meaning to your piece here love. I really like how you captured the endure moment of embracing poems you guys make it so hard to judge hugs
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What a beautiful take on the contest prompt. Excellent writing, love is more than beautiful, it's part of nature.
Good luck in this contest. Just a note, it's a little hard to read this text on this coloured background
Bandaid. -
High-Five!
This piece is really cute. Well, on the surface it is anyway. It's also really deep. You've made good use of my personal favorite, the AA,BB ryhme scheme. Overall this is a good piece. Write on Poet and Good Luck in the contest.
Peace and Love,
K.
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