An awkward silence
Between lively eyes
A quiet violence
Allows love to rise
There is much to say
Not a word is spoken
On this rainy day
Our souls almost broken
Very subtle lust
On this fateful date
A powerful trust
We will soon create
My hand touches hers
So softly but firm
Silent emotion stirs
That loudly affirms
With so much power
We patiently stare
Hour upon hour
Ecstatically aware
A contest entry
- Quickie for the Bored Poet by zillion.
300 points, ended June 15, 2007, 11 entries
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very cool.
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Very subtle lust
On this fateful date
A powerful trust
We will soon create
Love this poem. There is so much emotion within each stanza. Your use of rhyme is also superb. Something else I noticed is that, dating does not come easily, from what I am reading. It has been a long time since I have been on the dating scene, but I sensed a hit of anxiety about it, and yet, the beauty of possibilities shines through.
You are an excellent poet, please keep writing, and I will try to stop by your page more often.
Thank you,
Katina
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extremely well written piece
nicely illustrated
really draws me in
and I grasp the entity of it
you had a great sense of imagery
and language in here
beautiful poem
I really like it
keep writing -
good
very well done -
nicely done
you did a wonderful job...I hope you continue to write poetry...because as you keep writing it gets better and better and before you know it you're a master of poetry...keep up the great work..I can't wait to read more...
your friend,
ace ♠
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Why does it seem that there are so many awkward silences? At least when something important is happening. It's also weird how one moment can often seem like a lifetime. or vice versa.
Zill
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