With the wings of my heart
Flapping oh so quickly,
But passion burned holes,
So I'm still falling into
The black that is heartbreak,
Spiralling quickly into
The twisting black nether
That she had left for me.
Eyes closed, shutting out
The visions of my happy past,
But memories sing in an eerie melody,
Further shattering my heart,
So I shut them out
With my tears and my sobs.
Even this crucifix I wear about my neck
Cannot protect me from these demons,
This ritual of deceit and false hope,
The agony she cursed me with,
And I cast in off into
The swirling black abyss,
And from the pit I see
Every last bit of my hope and
Composure slip from within,
And I begin to feel like
I should have all along;
Alone and cold and isolated,
Alone and cold and isolated,
Ever so isolated
Author notes
What more can I say? *smiles to himself*
TulipsWithThorns
Option 1
A contest entry
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600 points, ended June 20, 2007, 16 entries
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Love to hear what you think.
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A very deep dark write to me...filled with pain from what I read.
Your emotions were expressed very well in this.
Thank you for entering and Good Luck!
debbie -
Awe hun,
Thank you for entering!
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please go back and read the rules and change acoringluy then mess. me thanks LIllie
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"This ritual of deceit and false hope"
"Every last bit of my hope and
Composure slip from within,"
i really like these lines, collectively the poem is good. i could really feel what had happened, the poem had an excellent length aswell
0o0o and i really like how you enphasize 'isolation'
--awsome write
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well done
well done keep it up. I loved that you were not afraid to poor out your heart ache and pain. That you kept the beat of it slow and steady as a beating breaking heart. Your words are felt and recognized just so you know your not alone in the pain you feel. -
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Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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i like this, although i'm not a fan of poem entered into more than one contest... your words are powerful and heart wrenching! thanks for your entry and the best of luck...
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This is pretty good. It isn't something I usually read, but I really did like how you worded things, iti really made this piece stick out in my mind.
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This was a good poem. Good luck in the contest and thanx for entering.
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