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Yesterday

The fragile soul of a child is lost.
Waltzing through echoes of a father's voice,
that is slowly fading into a never ending sky.

Only in dreams can she hear her father's sweet voice.
While staring at a blackened sky, with stars slowly
starting to fade, she see's her daddy's face.
Lost in dreams of a sweet deception,
she embraces him one last time.

With broken dreams and a father that is forever lost,
all that is left are tainted remnants of yesterday.
The final day her daddy was alive.
Squeezing his baby tight not wanting to let go,
He whispers in her ear that she is and will forever
be his one and only knucklehead.

Her mind is framed in confusion, pain is seeping in.
Questions racing within her mind causing her to cry.
Why did they put my daddy in the ground?
Why is he not coming back?
Is it something that I did to make my daddy leave?

With words spoken in vain, Her mommy begins to say,
"Daddy is in heaven now and there is where he'll stay.
It definitely is not your fault, you see my dear
God is lonely and misses daddy so he sent him home."

But didn't God know that she was lonely too.
She needed her daddy much much more.
Besides he already had a home with her.

Ripped into reality, the little girl is stunned.
Her daddy is  gone forever and she is all alone.
All there is left to do is keep her daddy in her heart,
and remember yesterday.

Author notes

My dad died when i was just seven years old and that was the most life changing experience for me. Many people think that a child of that age cannot comprehend death and that is completely wrong. Never under estimate the pain of a child.

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautifully heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    April 15, 2008

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    Please pass the tissues for tears are flowing over here...your words reach inside and lay heavy upon the heart...I can feel your pain and deep loss...Niaish so much for sharing with me and for entering


  • Nikki Rowles
    March 16, 2008

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    OMG....what with all the dad poems....they are really good but they depress me....but that was really good...I all most cried

  • OhNoChastity
    December 28, 2007

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    Ahh, what a good thing to write about. The perception of death from a child. It's something I haven't seen before and I amend you for this. I felt the love and pain.

    The last line is powerful, brings back the image of the past.

    Thank you and good luck.


  • HeavensDaughter
    December 27, 2007

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    Powerful

    Wow...this really lets me see into the world of pain caused in a little girls heart by the loss of her daddy. I can see so clearly her confusion...her questions...her hurt.

    I am saddened that you lost your dad...and especially at such a young and tender/fragile age.

    "The fragile soul of a child is lost.
    Waltzing through echoes of a father's voice,
    that is slowly fading into a never ending sky."
    This is powerful imagery. Very vivid. Very real to touch the heart.

    "He whispers in her ear that she is and will forever
    be his one and only knucklehead."
    This is so precious. I am glad that you have that to hold onto when you think of him.

    "Only in dreams". Wow! What a hard reality to face.

    I believe that your writing this poem could be a tribute to that father you lost in death. Was that your intent? Have you considered writing poems about what you remember about him? Maybe you have...I am still reading your poems...when I can.


  • loveyourfate
    December 15, 2007
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    Ripped into reality, the little girl is stunned.
    Her daddy is gone forever and she is all alone.
    All there is left to do is keep her daddy in her heart,
    and remember yesterday.

    I'm sorry for your loss, you made a wonderful poem. Thanks for your entry.


  • JadedxPassion
    July 3, 2007

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    The fragile soul of a child is lost.
    Waltzing through echoes of a father's voice,
    that is slowly fading into a never ending sky.

    Beautiful,strong lines.

    Why did they put my daddy in the ground?
    Why is he not coming back?
    Is it something that I did to make my daddy leave?


    Ah, A beautiful job of a child's innocent perception of death.

    The last line in this poem added a definate something. Great job


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 23, 2007

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    Such a very potent piece of emotional depth. Sad, and touching - your words leave their mark. Thank you for your entry & Brest wishes in the contest!


  • poet2angels gold member
    June 23, 2007

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    beautiful and emotional...Wonderful use of the phrase bank
    TY for entering!

    Lynda


  • Beating gold member
    June 17, 2007

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    "Squeezing his baby tight not wanting to let go,
    He whispers in her ear that she is and will forever
    be his one and only knucklehead."
    That part just brought a tear to my eye. And the last stanza is also just so moving. Oh my...

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