Tears are streaking my face
in the glassy moonlight here
trembling, heart beating at a rapid pace
my only thought is my fear
You take my hand, softly you kiss it
I shutter at first, then settle down
my fears are slipping away, I don't miss it
you slip your arms around me, sitting on the ground
Your hand brings me security and strength
there's no one else that would go such a length
A contest entry
- Hands by theredcatjazzoflove.
650 points, ended June 15, 2007, 12 entries
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Comments
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Nicely done indeed, however line 6 needs the "T's" replaced with "D" perhaps? and the last line, "go (to) such a length"... I read chataneese though so know what ya meant!!!...
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A nice tease
you had me wraped up in to your melody and then you pulled the card on my ears. why? you was delivering such a power threw your story you should have not cut me off like that but the piece is great thats why i am fussing lol nice write.
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