Standing on a street corner
a car happens to drive by
a old man with a crooked smile
he's balding
and i can see his lustful advantages on me
he pays me $250 upfront
tells me he wants the whole night
I get into his car
and watch him drive
he starts to feel my thigh
his hand goes up my leg
farther and farther
still he drives
to a old motel
another room number I dont even care
a night of pleasure for him
just another day at work for me
the sun rises
and he pays me my final due
tells if I want more fun he'll be seeing me soon
I walk back home
bastard wont even drive me
i wipe off the powder mask
go to sleep till five o'clock
get up again
the same routine
will you come see me tonight?
Author notes
ehhh i think i could've added more detail and i might do that later
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Yeah I definately think you should add some more detail, it helps us picture the actions and perhpas add a little more feeling and disgust into the write to give it a little more zest. Let me know if you tweek.
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that wouldn't be the life that i would want to get up to every night. can you imagne the convo's over christmas dinner or calling your mom. you couldn't go home anymore and your family would so hate you. i feel bad for the woman that have to do it to raise there family but for the whore that does it because she's a drug addicted i don't .. nice job....
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Would be a hard life to live day after day
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