My soul loves you,
the feeling of your passion over takes me.
Embraced my Heart
inside my body, warm and cozy like a winter fire
I desire your hands to caress my face,
leaning toward your every soft spoken word, that
fell from your lips,
like slow dripping Honey from a bee hive.
I knew, that once my eyes met yours
everything I ever doubted in my past life
didn't even matter anymore.
Right now, this very moment
my soul loved you,
deeper than the ocean, as
my arms open wider than any sea.
Crystalized tear drops
fell from my face,
placed upon the crevice of your hand
I knew that, it didn't matter what happened
you loved me, & I loved you
while our lips met, it was
like the sweetness of early morning dew.
Blood ran through my veins like a Grapevine
Trailing along the fence of my heart,
the foundation has been layed, and
stood firm in my mind as
the love and passion we shared, blossomed.
I stood there, gazing
into the blackness of your eyes
that reflected of my silhouette
as you saw of your's in my eyes.
Warm and cozy toughts arouse, as a smirk come across my face
slowly entering into this world,
hand in hand.
Emotions flowed, like rapid waves
my soul loves you, yet
your soul desires me.
For the very first time, I
Regret nothing.
Realizing then, that this is exactly
where both of us wanted to be.
Author notes
"Letters from the Heart"
E-Book Choice.
In a list
A contest entry
- The Muse by someones-muse.
480 points, ended August 22, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Partners In Crime Group Contest - Second Chances by Partners In Crime.
500 points, ended August 12, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your love is like a kiss in the wind by Swan song.
700 points, ended September 8, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling All Writers & Poets Alike....! by B Chandler.
1050 points, ended January 29, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the emotion that oozes from this, however I think that poeticly this would be better if there was some punctuation along with it.
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Thank you for your critique
I will review this again shortly for editing.
ephiphany♥
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Thank you for your entry,I've enjoyed reading.
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Thank you for reading.
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Love it!
This is fantastic!
"My soul loves you
Deeper than the ocean" Oooh...I so like this poem. It sums up just what I feel in love. Pam
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Thank you Pam
I really appreciate you stopping by,
Thanks,
Ephiphany
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This is a very beautiful poem and I enjoyed reading it. it is honest and and smooth in lfow I will read this again
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Thanks, Jeff
I appreciate you more than words can explain
e
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I still like this one Nice, nice
Thank you for the entry and good luck to you in the contest
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thank you
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Very Well Done
This is very well written. I loved this piece so much. Well done my friend and good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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Thanks countrybabe
I know it's a lil late, but I didn't notice this message until today, when i was thumbing thru my notes
sorry bout that.
Ephiphany♥
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The last lines are awesome, summing up the whole poem perfectly Good luck in the contest
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thanks
queen. I really appreciate it.
Piffy
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The system wont allow me to applaud again but you know I think you deserve it
Dee
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Yeah I know....
thanks again, just trying to get it in
Piff
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I've read this one before and I still think it's a wonderful piece.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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I love the line where you said "Embraced my Heart" it was a googd line and i loved your poem thank you for the write
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Thank you
for this comment.
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beautiful. just wonderful. loved these lines.
You Loved me
I Loved You
Our lips met
Like the sweetness of Early Morning Dew
Blood ran through my veins like a Grapevine
Trailing along the fence of my Heart
The Foundation has been layed
Stood firm in my mind
The love and Passion we share
I stand there gazing into the blackness of your eyes
seeing my Reflection
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Thank You
I am truly grateful for your comment.
Much luv,
Ephiphany
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You've written a beautiful and sensual poem, rich with emotion, subtly erotic.
The only thing I see which is a little distracting is the caps at the beginning of each line. Only my opinion, of course
A beautiful piece and I wish you good luck in our contest
Dee
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hey Ms Dee
Thank you for such a wonderful comment. I've been meaning to fix that but keep forgettin. Thanks for reminding me.
I appreciate you.
Piff
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This is nice I wish u the best of luck in the contest
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This is a truly lovely poem, Good luck in the contest
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Oh my, this is a good poem, lovely in every way Best wishes in the contest...Dove
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lovely background
zappy with passion and love
your wording expressed all the emotions exactly how i wanted to read it.
the only part i didn't LOVE was the ocean-sea part. cause you know the hymn "wide, wide as the ocean. deep, deep as the sea. high, high as the heavens above...." etc? well, i've heard it one too many times
but that's not your fault now is it?
good luck~
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Emotions flowing like the waves in Water
My soul Loves you
Your Soul Desires Me
For the very first Time
Regretting Nothing
Realizing that this is exactly where both of us wanted to be
Yep..I knew I liked it before and I still do...this is love at it's best
Good luck in this contest
XXJeannette
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Thank you
you are so sweet.
Piff
Much luv
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Beautiful
Wow, what a wonderful poem about the beauty of human contact! You wrote the poem so tactfully that I feel like I am experiencing the connection of my soul with the opposite sex.
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Thank You
I appreciate your comment on this. I am truly grateful.
Ephiphany
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Gorgeous write
This is a very gorgeous piece of writing here. i loved this poem. Well done and goo dluck in the contests you have it in.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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Countrybabe
You are so sweet...thank you
Ephiphany
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Great write. & a lovely background..
Thanks for entering my contest..& Best of Luck
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Hi & Thank You
You have some wonderful options in your contest, I really enjoy the participation and the opportunity to meet new people.
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beautiful...
best of luck in the contest, thank you for entering
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Thank You Tash...
It's my pleasure to participate.
Piff
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This is beautiful and it is even more so every time I read it. The background was magnificent! Wonderful job. Thx so much for your entry. Good luck! -Inc."
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Thank you Diva
Glad to see you finally here in tha HIzzzhouse!
NT way, very busy at work, on and off...making sure these folks money right for next week u know how that goes...well I will holla at u later.
You know where I be.
K
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You have written some stunning lines in this poem. The metaphors make me sigh. Even the cliches we hear over and over are placed just right in this work, as not to distract but pull us in.
"My soul loves you
Deeper than the ocean
My arms open wider than any Sea"
Beautiful! Thanks for the link. Love like this ought to be bagged and sold. This was my pleasure.
april nicole
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Hey there April....
Your comment was very nice and I thank you for taking the time to read this. Please keep in touch and I will do the same.
Ephiphany
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What beautiful emotion you have penned my dear friend.
Very rich, and ther are too many lines that I love in order to pick any out. I wish you luck in the contest!
I need to back in the diva swing, too, lol.
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Hey Luna...
No matter what, girl you will always be a Divine Diva...we all are regardless of what happens in life. That is the Beauty of it all.
Thank you for reading this, as you can see, Im still being me
Much luv hope to c u soon,
Piff
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wow! you sure are popular and modest!!!
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ohh!! this is suchh a great poem!!! i can feel the aroma in the air now!!!
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Hi raphire....
Thank you for such a wonderful comment.
I hope that you will keep in touch and I will be checking on you.
Ephiphany
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the random scattered words that are capitalized throughout the piece seem to interrupt the flow of the poem.
"Fell from my face, placed upon the creavice of your hand"
you misspelled the word crevice in line 16
"Like the sweetness of Early Morning Dew
Blood ran through my veins like a Grapevine
Trailing along the fence of my Heart"
-the metaphors you use are amazing
very cute poem, youre an amazing writer, keep it up!
good luck in my contest!
<33
Muffin Girl
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Hey There
Thank you for your helpful comments on this.
I did correct the misspelled word, must have overlooked it when I was Proofreading, however, I appreciate your views and it's my pleasure to participate in such a wonderful well planned contest.
Ephiphany
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AMAZING!!! a beautiful write!!! I wish that it could have been in the contest. thanks for telling me about it.
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Yeah...I know
thank you so much for stopping by, I appreciate you reading this. Maybe next time, huh?
Ephiphany
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beautiful
after the day I've had.. this is nice to read.
You capture romance SO well.
w.love
Me
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Hey Girl....
Glad you caught me, I was about to go to bed...thanks, so glad you liked it.
Piff
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Simply Amazing
Hello, Your poem is soft and sensual and sweet all rolled into one. You have penned such romantic and heartfelt words with lovely imagery. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and smiles. Bless you Take care, Auntie Sandy.
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Hey Ma...
look Auntie Sandy's been here
Missed you, sorry, but I appreciate you taking the time to read this. Didn't think you would stop by so soon, but nevertheless, I thank you and appreciate all you do.
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what a beautiful heart touching poem you have penned here. it touches the soul of the reader and may be an inspiration for many. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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Hey Ma
Missed you
How are you, oh and thanks for the Critique, I always appreciate your time to view it.
So, have you been resting well?
KaPricia
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Superb!!!
Slowing entering into this world
I think this line needs to be fixed. This is certainly one of the most amorous poem I've read. It certainly captured the reader and drags him along. Your heart poured down like pearly rain. It has a nice feel to it. I really love it. Circumstances make us write our heart. I think your understanding has matured as well. Keep up the most wonderful job and may God bless you....
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Thank You Mack
I appreciate your views on this...I am fixing that typo...thanks, I overlooked that one, when I was proof reading.
I knew I could count on you.
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Beautiful !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh wow...this is just sooooooo beautiful...and my soul loves someone too...so I can relate to the most of this poem soooo much.... Well it's hard sometimes
shed a lot of tears..and still am...but this just is beautiful,,and I hope your souls will stick together
Great write Sis and the background is beautiful
XXJeannette
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Hey Jeannette
Sis, I always appreciate you visiting and commenting on my work. Truly God Blesses even when we don't give ourselves the credit. Thanks for looking out. Thank for everything.
KaPricia
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Beautiful write. Loved the part of the past life. It makes me think of how we may be drawn to certain people in our lives. Like, maybe even though we can choose our paths in life, sometimes certain people may just be meant to come our way and be a part of our lives. Keep up the great work.
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Thank You Arzab
for taking the time to stop by. Your comments mean a great deal of importance to me and keeps me Inspired to write what's in my heart.
Amazing,
Ephiphany
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Alright!!! Are you showing off! This was an actual flow of beauty for me. The words you used in this were soft and powerful all in the same. You did it again. Thanks for sending this to me. I needed something good to read. Now if I only had the inspiration to write....still nothing *shrugs* Keep Writing!!!
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Thank You Divine Diva
I had that to happen to me as well a few weeks ago...but today, something just came over me and I just went with the Pen Flow...so glad you liked it, I try my best.
Piff
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Wow
Blow me away!!! This is BEAUTIFUL~ Someone is very lucky!!! Nice! You written this perfectly!
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Hey Malicai
Thank you...thank you, very much. I owe this to everyone who Believed in me...no matter what.
God Bless
Ephiphany
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Holy Cow
this is one of the most beautiful writes i have ever read. You grabbed me from the beginning and melted me by then what a profession of love you have made beautiful with your words thank you so much for the pleasure of reading your work....Michael
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Thank You Michael
I thank you, for such an Inspring comment.
Truly appreciated.
Ephiphany
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Melting I ce....
with this piece sis I must agree with Wayne which is another gifted writer. you struck the weakest of hearts with this write and i dont know where your drives comes from but the fuel that is being put in your tank is supreme and I love it its just marvelous.
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Thank You So Much...Julia
I always appreciate you taking time out to read my work.
Sharing such encouraging words to help me continue on this Poetry Journey.
Much Diva Luv,
Ephiphany
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Wow
Thank you...You really like it?
I really appreciate your comment.
Ephiphany
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STUNNINGLY-BEAUTFIUL!!!!!!!!!!
STUNNING WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT. IT IS WONDERFUL. BREATHTAKING WORDS, ACTUALLY VERY VERY BEAUTIFUL INDEED. IT FLOWS LIKE THE FINEST CRYSTAL WATER. MORE PLEASE, YOU WROTE THIS FROM DEEP INSIDE YOURSELF, AND IT SHOWS.
WAYNE
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