Swinging lovely straw;; grasping toes beneath the water and clinging to heartache.
Ten thousand pennies and a busted juke box;;
and what do we do with the left over dancing shoes?
I scrambled for the little pieces of you that had fallen,
and smushed my head beneath the raining sweet 'n' low packets that she threw at me.
broken collar bone on the vines covering your euphemisms,
[youliedyouliedyoulied]
how many days, nights, weeks, did we lie awake;;
with your fingers laced through mine,
and you whispering that you still always cared?
But you chopped down the cherry tree,
you moved on and off to the silver stars on that pavement,
and I crashed and burned in her arms.
tepid thoughtless moments;;
shattering vaccuum white noise into the sky.
Writing letters to an empty town,
soulless embodiment and lost mistakes,
what if, what if, ((what if imissyou))
my bet is, I bought your soul on ebay
--and it was only 50 cents.
[poke, gag, repeat;; chew, purge, re-eat.]
I'm always waiting with tissues and a cup of cold tea,
barefeet and eyebrows in smudgy mirrors.
poetry in potted plants, feet collapsing over sticky railroad tracks and stubborn nails.
I picked fragments of your smile off of the lawn,
peeling back the grass and shoving sticks to prop up our itchy backs.
I sold you paper clips to put yourself back together,
and the safety pins you shoved through yourself,
could never fix the holes in the cotton.
You didn't believe that the ice cream man would ever come,
and I couldn't blame you;;
because he'd already turned on those bells so many times,
and then driven by with just a wave;;
leaving us standing on the street corner,
dragging our tongues on the cement and longing to escape.
Author notes
I think I need a vacation;;
In a list
you are always my number one
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HOLY SHIT!!
This poem was amazing I dont even know how to discribe it. It was just jaw dropping. Excellent work.
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I loved the whole darn thing
some great imagery here
I can really imagine what went on
really draws me, so inspiring
what an original voice,
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peeling back the grass and shoving sticks to prop up our itchy backs.
I sold you paper clips to put yourself back together,"
beautiful, I love that line
keep writing
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I love this poem, it is so amazing, I completely feel into the world you created in this poem.
I really loved the lines:
"my bet is, I bought your soul on ebay
--and it was only 50 cents."
that was a really interesting thought. thank you for sharing this poem with millions of strangers.
-Ink
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wow i'm speechless.A great write.
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You always make me think...and did you know that every time I re-read one of your poems, I get something new from it, I think that is a great thing.
You know I love the way you write dear, and I know I always say the same thing
but you're pieces are always amazing and intriguing!
Even though sometimes, it takes me awhile to catch on, and sometimes...I don't.
brilliant girl
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aw, well your comments always make me happy.
so it doesn't matter. :]
I'm glad you get something out of them sweetie.♥
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I'm speechless.
yeah... my brain has most defff malufunctioned.
lots of love
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the title was what caught my attention and I was very impressed with your points. I think you did a wonderful job so detailed. Great write
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I'm not gonna lie, I clicked because of the title.
And read.
And re-read.
And let it sink in.
This is beautiful. Honestly. It took me back to one of the happiest times of my life with just a few simple lines:
"how many days, nights, weeks, did we lie awake;;
with your fingers laced through mine,
and you whispering that you still always cared?"
--Because thats so true. Which probably shouldnt bring me back to a h.a.p.p.y. time. But anyways.
This is deffinately getting bookmarked. And you are deffinately getting added to my faves.
Wonderful Write!
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wow, I VERY mych enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing! I like how you wrote about normal things in unusual places ,(sorry can't think of a better way to explain that), "fragments of your smile off of the lawn". I loved how you used your words, and how you seem to have figured out exactly how you feel. Again, thanks for the great read.
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This is full of images and description, I think the last stanza loses the momentum just a tiny bit by coming up for air on the first line and breaking rhythm, but this is splendid. Very emotional. -
Seems stream of conscience and chaotic and yet somehow enlightened and cohesive. Many things revealed between parentheses. "broken collar bone....still always cared?" my favorite lines of the piece.
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goodness hun.. this paragraph had me at the first sentence.
Writing letters to an empty town,
soulless embodiment and lost mistakes,
what if, what if, ((what if imissyou))
my bet is, I bought your soul on ebay
--and it was only 50 cents.
i dont know the way you said letters to an empty town really attracted my lust for imagery. bloody brilliant dollie pie ♥
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Swinging lovely straw;; grasping toes beneath the water and clinging to heartache.
Ten thousand pennies and a busted juke box;;
and what do we do with the left over dancing shoes?
I scrambled for the little pieces of you that had fallen,
and smushed my head beneath the raining sweet 'n' low packets that she threw at me.
broken collar bone on the vines covering your euphemisms,
[youliedyouliedyoulied]
how many days, nights, weeks, did we lie awake;;
with your fingers laced through mine,
and you whispering that you still always cared?
Sweetie we all need a vacation.
I love this poem even though it
made me sad. ily bb<3
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