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Losian of Hetha

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Losian of Hetha

‘Twas early morn, aerdaeg yet na be cast.
Whence pulling me self aside the listing ship;
a mid-ship boarding behind the mizenmast.
Simple task perchance; cutlass at me hip.
Pillage the captains’ cabin ‘twas me task.
A silken gown ‘peared from a chest of oak;
‘tis I who should adorn this lovely mask.
Booty gathered; concealed beneath me cloak.
Yea, I took me leave with stealth adeptness.
Aboard me dingy; a narrow escape.
With jewels and gold and all the prettiness.
Taking me leave; booty beneath me cape.
Yea, the captain rose and came to the rail.
Nay, I shan’t be a wielen in his jail.

 

 

 

Author notes

Shakespearian Sonnet

To keep the volta at L9 this sonnet my seem to end abruptly. It could be written to be a double sonnet but I thought the book actually told the story.
Old English Translations:
losian: escape
ærdæg: daybreak
wielen: bondwoman 

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 18, 2007

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    Tis was a breathtaking piece my dear friend.
    Great job and love this sonnet form. I shall try it soon although just starting these forms I will need much practice.
    great job and I see you had previously won a gold maybe you will in this one as well.
    worthy of it for sure.

    passionspromise


  • captain howdy
    September 15, 2007
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    A lovely sonnet to behold! You always were good at these! Best of luck in the contest!


  • McRae by nature
    September 14, 2007

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    Wow, you really did take me away This felt so deeply of another time and age. Great job. I loved the language.

    Carrie


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    An amazing presentation on this page - great background, picture and poem - fit together so wonderfully. can see why it took top spot.


  • Hetha gold member
    June 28, 2007

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    *Scratching head* i do believe I missed this in the last contest I had..hmm..perhaps this will do better in this one! I'm a sucker for form poetry, and I'm quite partial to the subject. Excellent! I love Old English style.


  • Swan song gold member
    June 26, 2007

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    Your knowledge always shines through thank you for entering I love reading your work it is always my pleasure


  • Lord Merlynn
    June 16, 2007
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    this is an amazing story, well well written and researched. It was very enjoyable to read.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 15, 2007

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    This is amazing my friend~i just love this old English Shakespeare type of poems you can do them so wonderfullythank you so very much for sharing...masterpiece!


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    June 15, 2007

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    This is an excellent sonnet piece, I love the Old English language. Thank you for the translations too Good luck in the contest, this seems like a perfect entry!

    Bandaid.

  • Hetha gold member
    June 14, 2007
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    *Whistling loudly and appreciatively* Hassah! This is superb! I like that it was told from the perspective of the thief,(the main character,) in the tale. A first.
    Your terminology is true to the spirit of pirating, and I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest!


  • ellipsist
    June 14, 2007

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    I read it

    aloud, though, in my haughty British accent, which didn't work so well...

    It sounded like the Geoffrey Rush pirate character from Pirates of the Caribbean narrating when I read it in my head and not aloud...

    I'm no expert, but it seems perfect to me...


  • RedAquarius
    June 14, 2007

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    Love the Old English touches within, definitely seals the atmosphere. Great story and amazing display of a form that scares the pants...or cape! off me!


  • Desire gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!!


    Powerful piece You have created and it helps if I can type...geeeeeeeeeeesh!!
    I just loved this verse You have penned
    Beautiful presentation and content...
    At the edge of my seat!!
    Form Queen

    Loved it!!
    Thank You for sharing this Brilliant piece!

    Many blessings to You in this contest!
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    My first sample in your pool of work.
    It's a lovely piece and once again shows the real power of traditional forms in poetry.
    Needless to say I'm left waiting for the tale to spin on...


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 14, 2007
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    very well done, an excellent story telling in the structure of a sonnet...PK


  • PerVirtuous
    June 14, 2007

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    Beyond impressed. There is nothing more to say. Keep it up. Three more bunnies. YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • bedovich
    June 14, 2007

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    oh sis another fine piece the backgrounds are sooooooooooo sweeeeeet well done sis hope to read more and more of you goood lukcs hun and the pic wowwwwwwwwwwww princesss great work hun i love it loadssss


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    A superb write little cubbie, superb, grand tale of adventure and escape, excellent word choices, as for the "With jewels and gold and all the prettiness.
    I took me leave; booty beneath me cape." You know, to me I care not for such pretties, never have, for its my freedom I treaure most above all. unfortuantly, in some ways I may treasure it a little too much?



    Dad

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