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On Waking

Soft morning glow reaches past the glass,
brushing my cheek with a lover's caress

My mind returns from realms of dreams
to the fresh reality of life

And as sleep flees from the corners of sight
the blur of  colors  take shape: my room

Thoughts crystalize in bright certainty
I know I have a choice to make
I know I have to make a choice
Who am I?

Today, before rising, the possibilities
Fan out into a thousand and one answers
That stretch away beyond comprehension

I can choose to make a friend
    choose to be an enemy

I can choose to be a hero, or a coward

I can choose to display kindness
    choose to turn away

I can choose to be myself, or a lie

I can choose to walk the angel's road
    choose to tread the path of hell

And it all depends on these next few minutes
When the mirror shows me what I am
When the mirror tells me who I'll be

Treading softly down the hall
I seek the answer
To the lies I inhale on waking

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  • Frodofan silver member
    January 28

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    I like the theme, but don't particularly like this style. It does have a lot of interesting thoughts in it. I personally hate waking. Dreaming is so much more fun and interesting.

    But this is a lot like what I think every morning too.


  • angelelectra
    January 22

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    Heartfelt

    That was one of the most intense poems i read in a while! I think it was a really heartfelt on and i just love the way some emotions just contradicted each other as your words flew along.
    Great job keep it up!

  • CharlotteRose
    January 14

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    Oh, dear! I love this! I often find so much peace in walking and often return home, have decided many things. Something about the nature sounds, the wind blowing in my hair, and the feel of the road never fail to ease my mind. Anyway, I do love the emotion and theme of this piece, and the way you incorporated the concept of choice. Well done, poet!

    "Not all who wander are lost..."


  • Third Rock Royalty
    October 27, 2007

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    hello my friens, you have done excedingly well. Though this is second to new. I encourage you to seek inspiration. That is all.
    -NP

  • Pianokidd
    June 24, 2007
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    Waking up...then having to make choices. Awesome Job!

    I can choose to make a friend
    choose to be an enemy

    I can choose to be a hero, or a coward

    I can choose to display kindness
    choose to turn away

    I can choose to be myself, or a lie

    I can choose to walk the angel's road
    choose to tread the path of hell


  • WillowPrincess
    June 14, 2007

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    awesome. you did a great job at the beginning describing how it is to wake up.
    and the next few lines, about choosing, were my favorites. they have such a poignant message:

    I can choose to make a friend
    choose to be an enemy

    I can choose to be a hero, or a coward

    I can choose to display kindness
    choose to turn away

    I can choose to be myself, or a lie

    I can choose to walk the angel's road
    choose to tread the path of hell

    absolutely fabulous!
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