On my left; sinister demons
Whilst angels to my right
Try to suppress their malice
With their effervescent light
I’m caught always in the middle
In their continual fight
One is good and one is evil
So full of hate and spite
One glows a ghostly shimmer
A silver-glistened white
While the other lives in darkness
Blacker than the night
Both detached and still at war
They attack with all their might
And this is just a metaphor
For my internal plight
For we all have inner demons
Deep in our minds they dwell
Who always work against us
To give us endless hell
But we all have outer angels
Who help us to dispel
The evil that the demons bring
And comfort us as well
So when you’re down and out of it
Don’t fret and don’t despair
Because although the demons have your soul
The angels are always there
Author notes
I know this isn't great, it's not even good, I just needed to write something (anything) when I had time to go on the computer because I haven't in a while. Gah the title is really lame too, especially for me...harummphh
4, Write about the two sides of yourself- the 'devil' side and the 'angel' side...
In a list
A contest entry
- A cascade of magical options are flying in your face!!!!!! by AutumnsFlame.
415 points, ended June 27, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angels/Devils..... by Walking Oxymoron.
700 points, ended November 16, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I'm loving this!
I canm see why it got a gold! I don't usually pay much attention to prewrites as such, especially if I've seen the Gold trophy there already, but this write?
Amazing!
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I appreciate it
Don't give me another gold if it's unfair to other contestants
(ha! that sounds arrogant, but I mean if it comes to that anyway)
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You're right ...
the title is lame. I'd say "Always In The Middle" would work much better.
Congrats on the Gold trophy.
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I think this does work really well as a metaphor for our inner struggles. To play devil's advocate though, which one is truly evil and which one is truly good, it's not always what it seems and that's the problem.
Good write.
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That is very true, in life the line between right and wrong isn't so much a line but a smudgy grey area, thanks for your comment and applause x
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not good?
i thought it was great! a favorite of mine already. i mean.. i dunno what it is really.. its just.. great. cuz i feel that way.. a lot. like different parts of me are fighting eachother. i wrote a poem about it. ill post it on here.
great job!
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Wow, thanks for your wonderful comment Can't wait to read your poem ^^ x take care x thanks again! x
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Well, you did an outstanding job on this one! Wonderful flow and rhyme, I think the every other end-line rhyme works well in this piece. Thank God for angels
...Congrats on the Gold, well deserved
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Tehehe thank you for your wonderful pearly words of wisdom. Thank God for Angels indeed, I wouldn't have anything to write about if they didn't exist!! xxx
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WOW... If this isn't your best writing, I'd like you see what your best is because I thought you owned it... like this flowed really well and I don't say that to a lot of people!... Thank you for entering a good poem and good luck in my contest!
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Yeh. Not the greatest ever, but still pretty good. Nice use of the word effervescent.
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spiffilicious. i mean, it wasn't fantabulous, the flow and stuff could've worked a bit better than it currently does. but still awesome. very nice.
tell the world [all we need is love],
the existentialist
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