Our love, it shows us much, tonight it does
A kiss with such beauty, and grace I place
Upon your other lips so sweet because
It is there, within my love’s such embrace…
We show each other our love, and that how
In ways that can only be shown to be
That connection is true, for with us now
For now, I wish to make sweet love with thee…
Come to me, bring me your naked sweetness
M’lady, for with that I see your needs
As with mine, those needs have greatness
And come let us see now where that love leads…
Come to me m’lady, for it is I
Your true love, for that I cannot deny…
© Jonathan Wikkins July 26, 2003
Revised February 27, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written August 9th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Traditional Form: Sonnet Contest by nukerliu.
250 points, ended August 29, 2003, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Am I F***en Loved by theredcatjazzoflove.
450 points, ended April 1, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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different feel i must say i think you did a cool job penning this along with this back ground nice
Mrs. Lady Enthralling -
Oh Mike, oohhh lala This is one sensual piece to melt the hearts of your lady fair.Me thinks sonnets are your thing my friend, you do so well with them. This piece is seriously stunning makes me want to bat my eyes and blush hehehe Great job hun
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Wonderful write..:) just makes me sigh....
You have expressed so very well.
Hugs..
Mary Ann -
Thats good, Love the line
"I wish to make sweet love to the thee"
If only men talked like that! LOL
Good sonnet I too have entered the contest with my first ever sonnet! still not sure if it is right! Good luck you randy bugger!
Lakota x
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hmmmm... VERY nice... However perhaps you should drop 'such' from line four? And perhaps insert 'is' between that and how in line 5? (ooooh, my critical side has woken) just suggestions though... This is erotic without 'smuttiness' in its highest form. Loved it. ~~~Val
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You are a master sonnet writer, Mike.
Feels so very loving, sensual..but also
a vow is made within the words to abide
by the law of love. Beautiful. -
This is so beautiful, and sensual. I wish I could write a sonnett I am still learning. You are a master with words, I loved this poem.
Carrie
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