Heart beating rapidly
As we embrace and kiss
In the heat of the moment
Passion flares up
Each day had been so lonely
Now everything has changed
All because we gave in
Fear becomes the unknown
Dreams finally become real
Hope arises, strength renewed
Promises now being made,
Devoted forever
Author notes
Background Thanks To Maatkara
In a list
A contest entry
- 50 Words (7) by naked roots.
475 points, ended June 19, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is really captivating with deep meannings most especiall the last two words
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I love that ending...'devoted forever', sounds like it must be true love to me. Very romantic, great work! Thank you for entering!
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A lovely piece or poetry. I love the luring rhythm in this poem. This poem is excellent and enchanting. Keep penning such beauties. Long time dear. How about a visit to my page…
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Ohhhh, I think that is the best part of the challenge, fitting those poetic thoughts into 50 words and still captivating your reader. I just love these! You penned a lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it! Good luck in the contest
~Tia
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You're becoming quite the poetess of love poetry, and this poem fits the very title of "Devotion" so very well.
I know it's a challenge to fit a poem to word-count constrictions--Gosh, I have fits just trying to squeeze haiku into 17-syllables!
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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love the background and the write is beautiful... good luck in the contest
cheers
Jen
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butiful kari
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Nicely prosed poem. Dream love wished for becomes essentially real and tied in devotion.I enjoyed reading.
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Wow, very beautiful background indeed. Very romantic poem. Made me wish that all things were like they are in poetry.
Well, most things.
Best of luck in the contest.
Zill
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