Tears are a woman's jewelry; they sparkle and they shine
They've come from many places, some of them are divine
Countless moments of serenity; thinking family thoughts
How to help her troops to distinquish shouldn'ts from oughts
Various unexpressed emotions; who to express them to
She has cried an ocean before her life is through
Some of them were spent for weddings, most for funerals
And the irony of it is about the ones nobody knows
Deep are the pains of the emotions that it takes to pull them out
Those are the ones that only God can wipe away without a doubt
All the happy ones come from a brighter place
Those, she does not ever dream or want replaced
Some may look down upon the tears as if they're cursed
But I look up at them, and record them every verse
They are just so precious; golden sparkly nuggets one and all
And the beauty of the matter is her heart; that's always on call
Author notes
I chose option #1 Tears are a woman's jewelry
A contest entry
- Phrase/Quote Contest by burdened.
600 points, ended July 22, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Profound writing. Excellent piece. Best of luck in the contest. God bless you.
Hugs and love,
Petratani
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TY
Petra, this is a nice review, and I cherish it. lol
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Wow!...an excellent piece here...you have grown so much as a poet
deep are the pains of the emotions it takes to pull them out
those are the ones that only God can wipe away without a doubt...
great lines there and very true...God bless
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TY
And yes, some only God can handle. lol
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you are such an unconventional a writer .but always create excitement ..this is a great piece , i would wipe away your tears any time , well done again hugs
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Peter
What am I to do with you, just keep loving you I suppose. hahaha this is a most generous review. I will treasure it. lol
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This was beautiful. I loved the last two lines but overall the emotions you brought to the surface with your imagery made me proud to be a woman, complexities and all. The best of luck in this contest and for the future
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Wow
This is such a lovely review. I am most honored to receive it. Thank you so much.
lol
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TY
I got three of them, Ian. Thanks so much.
lol
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This is a lovely piece, I like the couplets. They make it easy to read, and it flows well. Thanks for your entry, and good luck.
A little suggestion, in the second couplet, I believe it should read 'shouldn'ts' instead of 'should'nts'. Apart from my nazi-ing, it's good. Take care XxX
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Thank you so much
I appreciate your review of this. lol
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