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Better

As I swing here,
I know the truth,
I see true life,
And while I swing here,
And look in their eyes,
I know why they did it,
Because im better,
A witch I am,
True in heart and soul,
I worship the goddess,
And The god by her side,
But because I see the truth,
The future and past,
They fear me,
They fear my power,
While I try to help them,
They gossip behind,
For where there is power,
There is jealousy,
But I blame them not,
I knew this day would come,
For they know not the world,
Not the way I do,
They see it as a thing,
Where I worship such a beauty,
So I shall swing with a smile,
And go into the goddesses arms,
For she knows as I do,
That my death only means life,
And that I died,
And the summerlands I now head for,
And though they have killed me,
I bless there lives,
And wish them well,
I hope they will know truth,
They will know love,
For this is the wiccan way,
We are not evil,
We wish no harm,
We have always been here,
And always will be,
Here to help,
Even when not known,
So I pray,
I pray for there forgivness,
For they know not what they do,
They never could,
But hopefully one day,
One day they will know,
Know what its like to be,
To be a witch,
And to be just better.

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  • February Moon gold member
    June 13, 2007
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    This whole poem was so profound up to the very end. The ending, your last words were a real letdown. You could have ended it so many beautiful ways, but you didn't. It almost feels like you gave up around the end. You could get your ending message across and word it a lot more beautifully. Thank you for entering, and good luck.
    Chelsea


    • stevens5613
      June 14, 2007

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      I totally see what youmean about the ending be a letdown. is it alright if i rewrite the ending and still be in the contest?? i know some judges would class that as cheating.
      Blessed be
      Chris

      • February Moon gold member
        June 14, 2007
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        You can change it. I give suggestions so people can better their poems. Please tell me after you change the end so I can comment on it again.
        Chelsea

        • stevens5613
          June 21, 2007
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          Well i have rewritten the ending. And i must say i do prefer this one, i hope you feel the same,
          Blessed be
          Chris
          XXxxXXxx

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