The rain outside the window
is the rain inside my soul
you promised you would stay
but now there's a you shaped hole.
And I don't think I can survive,
I'll let it wash me away,
Losing grip, losing [lost] you.
I don't know why it affects me so,
as it never lasted long
but this is something that the
rain.
Cannot damage
& in the end I think we'll find,
that the rain scatters thoughts
& gives way to grey skies.
What have I become?
Author notes
I love walking in the rain, 'cause then no-one knows I'm crying.
A contest entry
- Phrase/Quote Contest by burdened.
600 points, ended July 22, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a great piece, and i like the first stanza the best i think. 'a you shaped hole', that is my favourite line. It conveys sadness, andfits the quote. Good luck, and thanks for entering chick,
Xx
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wowzer!!!
great poem, and that quote thingy
in the author notes
blew me away [with tears!]
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I like how you formatted this one
It seems to match the content and mood of your title
so well. Thanks for sharing from your heart. lol
Also wishing you success in the contest.
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