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Red Pencil

Red pencil with the magic flair
Enrichment while in school
Dancing red marks are everywhere
Red pencil; teachers’ tool
Red pencil marks, to make it right
I studied hard with all my might
Red pencil marks
Red pencil marks
I passed the test to my delight

Pencil red is the teachers’ tool
Edified magic wand
Nebulous to the Golden Rule
Classroom and teacher bond
I want to teach, want to be free
Life as a teacher, that’s for me
I want to teach
I want to teach
Some day I’ll teach, Form Poetry

Red pencil with the magic flair
I studied hard in school
I’m now a teacher; answered prayer
Red pencil is my tool
I’m a teacher, I live my dream
Teaching poetry to the extreme
I’m a teacher
I’m a teacher
And my red pencil is supreme

 

 

_______________________

 

 

A teacher’s life is not for fame

A teacher’s life is not for wealth

A student’s life is not the same

A teacher gave him mental health

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Acrostic Trijan Refrain

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • creationsfromheart
    May 21, 2008

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    this is wonderful, I love the form have never seen this one before the rhyme is percise This is another amazing write from your pen AMera!


  • Tarja
    February 1, 2008

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    Congrats on the gold trophy. As usual you captivate me with your words and your style. Thanks so much for entering


  • Ithica silver member
    December 9, 2007

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    How cool, a poem about a real life dream come true! And yes I can say your are a fine teacher. Maybe I should be thankful you can't use a red pencil, online! Or can you? Congratulations of the Gold!


  • azure85 gold member
    June 19, 2007

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    Wow, I love learning new forms! And this one is excellent, it fits the subject so well. You added the special bonus of the acrostic, it is ingenuous. Well done!


  • ellipsist
    June 14, 2007

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    cleverly worded

    and the form reminds me a bit of a nursery rhyme...

    I am certain that it's difficult, yet you make it look so easy! this is a very cute piece...


  • Terry-too silver member
    June 14, 2007

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    Interesting form. It is as repetitive as the grading tasks that follow almost every lesson, where specific answers are expected, where the colored pencil acts.

    The wish to be a teacher is familiar. All who have been students know a few really great teachers who change our lives, and regrettably some who should have chosen other work, and eventually create angry parents.

    About the function of that red paencil, (pen, now):
    the fastest to mark, when a teacher is on full-time rotary with as many as four to six classes submitting similar results, was the multiple-choice test, with answers placed in blanks up the left edge. In marking they line up, one over the other with only the answers showing. Valid, fast! Count and score.

    The most valuable for students for reasons of literacy are essay-answered questions, especially those beginning "Why..." At fifteen to twenty minutes a test paper, a class of thirty would take more than seven hours to grade. And four classes? Per day?? Then there's tailoring printed assignments to the needs of kids... Is that why some do not?

    Those are unpaid hours taken away from family time.
    (An unknown reality among those critical of teachers.)

    Sorry- that went sailing off on a tangent.
    (I started teaching full-time in 1950. It gets in your blood.)
    Terry


  • PerVirtuous
    June 13, 2007

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    Fantastic. A delight to read. I love it when you do something like this. Raises the bar and makes me want to try harder.


  • Lord Merlynn
    June 13, 2007

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    This is a very well written piece, and a very unique form. I like this one. This form must be difficult to master, although it seems quite challenging and fun to write in. Great job, and good luck in the contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 13, 2007

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    I think this is very well done! Unique, cute, creative, and wonderfully done! Wishing you all the very best in this contest; this is excellent!!!!!


  • Hetha gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    Wonderful!

    I like how you also threw an acrostic in with the presentation, a poem within the poem. That is so your style. I LOVE it! This is adorable as well as educational. Good luck in the contest!
    Love,
    ~Hetha


  • Desire gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    Precious!!

    Wow!!
    This is one Beautiful piece You have penned and love the form You used
    Actually love all the forms You use
    Gorgeous presentation and I am so Proud of You!!
    Oy!! Form Queen
    Love this!!

    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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