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See Me

My earliest memory...
At five years old
My loving father lifting me high
Reaching, yearning
To touch the bright blue sky
My first story told.

At seven years old...
My beloved pet
A dog called trigger
Eighteen years old and dying
Run over, he cannot walk
My heart shattered, regret
Another story told

At eleven now...
Old enough to feel it all
My sister's harsh words
She bullys, taunts and frightens me
Singing becomes a passion
Eating becomes a crime
Succeeded in making me feel small
The hardest story I hold

Thirteen and teenaged...
A day before my birthday
18th September 1998
Grandpa you left me
I'm lonely, nana perished
I miss him even now
He was so sick though
Suffering ended
My heart broken, I'm cold

At fiveteen...
My first love found
Never thought it possible
Never beleived it could be
My heart trampled and discarded
It was right to feel the pain
Knew it was all I deserved
I pass years this way

Seventeen and free...
Another love, another hurt
Only worse than before
I should have learned my lesson
So incredibly blind to love
I have a nephew
See him everyday
Loved him dearly
A love grown to mold

At eighteen...
I see him
So much time passed by
Exstatic to see him
He didn't recognise me
Ripped and torn
I start to learn
Close up my shattered heart
My story almost told

At eighteen...
New man, a hasty start
Living together after four months
Stay together three and half years
Good times, bad times
I fall out of love
Begin to drift
I had to end it all
A story unfolds

I'm 21 now...
I have met you
I am happy and content
Life had many lessons to teach
Many memories on which to dwell
I take from them the moral
My stories told, my precious gold

Now you can look back,
See my stories
See me.

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  • Aurora Ceres
    June 19, 2007

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    This is wonderful. You've shared some beautiful & painful memories and taken me on a journey through bits and pieces of your past. I would have loved to have read more about you though. Don't get me wrong, I get what you were trying to do here, sharing your stories, allowing the reader to grasp the essence that is you through those stories and, while it worked in part, it still left so much open. You started getting a bit deeper in the last two stanzas but then it ended, just as the story was really getting good. Still, a wonderful job, just wanted to see more. Thank you so much for entering! Best wishes.


  • moment liver
    June 13, 2007

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    Awww babi, beautiful. But...you know what I'm hesitating at. You can't pretend the way you want things to be, I hope you figure this out. For yourself and for another...

    Beautiful babi, wonderful. I look forward to more.