Blew
chosen destiny
to the wind.
It whirled about
on unknowing breath;
latched hold of chaos
twirling 'round-
left me sorry,
and dying.
Before decided curtain bow,
whispered tears
touched your tongue,
and you knew
that single droplet
was not in vain.
Do you miss us?
A contest entry
- Have you had Distant Tears? by Whoochi.
900 points, ended June 25, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awww, tis none of our experiences in vain, for in it, we find a lesson learned.ty for this exceptional emotional piece.TY for entering & Best of Luck!
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Very well penned, I shall find you to do well in this contest. Talented Indeed to be found, not unnoticed.
E
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That is very interesting. It makes me think about some of the more meaningful relationships i've been in.
"Before decided curtain bow,
whispered tears
touched your tongue,
and you knew
that single droplet
was not in vain."
I really like these lines here. Even though most of the relationship i've been in ended on a sour note, I done regret them at all. As you said, it was not in vain. I also like how you ended your write.
"Do you miss us?"
That is a question that most of us ask ourselves. Very good write miss nicole.
Cory
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aww. i should say more but i would just end up saying something crazy.
this is such a great write.
=D
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