I saw you just the other night;
two bodies outlined in the light.
You held her near you, tight and close,
there by our old house on the coast.
As I watched you from afar -
each kiss, each move - opened a scar
each touch, each laugh - a skip in time
that took me back when you were mine.
I was helpless but to stare
while her hands ran through your hair.
I longed to touch your skin, your face;
wishing I could just erase
every moment, every day,
since you left and went away.
You once were mine and I was yours;
now you’re not, for you are hers.
I heard you found another love -
someone that you were so proud of;
so I had to come and see.
Remember when that once was me?
Friends say I have to let you go
and I will, but this I know;
no matter how she treats her man -
she can’t love you like I can
Author notes
as per the contest rules:
"I will see the movie 'In Bruges' in 2008 when it's released"
A contest entry
- Work my favourite lyrics - not that hard! by Morgaine.
400 points, ended July 4, 2007, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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See, I totally love this. I completely totally love this. Not only did you pick lyrics that haven't been used most of the time, you also made an actual poem from it that sounds right as if the lyrics belong in it. An amazing job, thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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You never cease to amaze me with you work I could read it all day Such a gentle flow to this piece filled with so much emotion.You write far to little for me my dear friend. Get that pen moving
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omg this was amazing. i can relate soo well to this and you wrote it beautifully. it reminds me of when it was me... paula deanda... but you used your words so well and they opened many of my own scars. good luck with this chick, you'll be okay♥
♥♥amanda
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