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"Elsewhere"

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The moment beckons


& I slide between its edges
before the reckoning
releases me

 

into slumbering solace
where dreams are safely tucked
into pockets of shadows,

languid with light.

Slowly, I breathe,


my eyes painting

a subtle universe
of understanding

 

before I wake with wildness
within the dawn's embrace.

I slip into warm sunlight's
yearning glance,

always learning
that to linger
in the savoring

 

might lessen its sweetness
& so I softly let it go

until it holds me close
once more...


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Option #2 Lyrics inspiration


Inspired by the song,


"Elsewhere"


by Sarah McLachlan


from the "Fumbling Towards Ecstasy" cd

 

 

 

 

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  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 17

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    Congratulations on receiving a silver chalice on this little jewel from your friend Lynda. You know how happy I am that you introduced me to Sarah McLachlan's music. I have written quite a few of my own poems since I started listening to her. Bravo, my Baby.



  • jasminerose
    June 26, 2007

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    Hi Wanda
    Congratulations on winning!!
    This is truly a beautiful poem!!
    Very lovely and very serene to the heart!
    Your words always paint such a beautiful picture for all of us to enjoy!!
    Congratulations!!!
    Linda


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 23, 2007

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    Such a great song, a favorite of mine - and you have captured the heart of it so well. Serene and deeply moving, a truly powerful write. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!


  • poet2angels gold member
    June 23, 2007

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    oh, Wanda...this is so gorgeous ..

    " I slide between its edges
    before the reckoning
    releases me



    into slumbering solace
    where dreams are safely tucked
    into pockets of shadows,

    languid with light."

    You know how to express emotions with such beauty!

    I love this
    Lynda

  • Just4u
    June 14, 2007

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    Oh sweet butterfly
    I set you free on wings of love
    Return, if thou trust

    Hugs...Eddy


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    This is so beautiful and soft...so serene...a gentle caress in words! What a lovely moment of contentment you've painted here...whispered upon this page. I so loved this one...what a joy to read and savour.

    ~ Nicolette

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    "into slumbering solace
    where dreams are safely tucked
    into pockets of shadows,

    languid with light.

    Slowly, I breathe,

    my eyes painting
    a subtle universe
    of understanding"

    these lines reminded me of the comfort i find in my dreams ... my obession with the beauty of even the most difficult dreams ...

    i suffer from sleep apnea (and it's much worst now that i drink far more than any human should)

    i find myself now, in an awake state, reminding myself to breathe, slowly, but ... i've done what i have had to do, and lightly achieved only a small bit of understanding ...

    if it is all possible ...


  • subliminalj
    June 13, 2007

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    beautiful. truly beautiful.

    always learning
    that to linger
    in the savoring
    might lessen its sweetness
    & so I softly let it go

  • Rowan gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    "always learning
    that to linger
    in the savoring
    might lessen its sweetness
    & so I softly let it go"
    you never disappoint me..lovely lines you've painted
    here.


  • whitewings
    June 13, 2007

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    speechless

    Whay can I say, this is a masterpiece of poetry. Am left speechless. Am a big fan of Sarah McLachlan.
    Would it be ok if i was to bookmark this page so i may read it more.
    Well done


  • Neha Sharma silver member
    June 13, 2007

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    Nice

    wow.. this is really a good work. I loved the imagery. the verse is so soothing and calm. The vivid description of sleep and dreams and the spirituality behind them calls for appreciation.
    good luck in the contest.
    good wishes
    -Neha


  • drybones
    June 13, 2007

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    Very good

    A beautiful description of that other dimension that lies parallel to what we call the "real world." The door that opens to this world of mists and shadow is called "slumber." Our dreams are without limit and are as varied as our hopes and aspirations. In this magic and mystical place, all things are possible. You have done an excellent job on this piece.


  • The Reapers Angel
    June 13, 2007

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    I like this poem, it fits so well with the original song.
    "before I wake with wildness
    within the dawn's embrace." I love this line! It's so deep, meaningful, and majestic.
    I like these types of poetry, you did it justice, I actually liked your poem better than the original song.
    Mainly because I thought the original took to long to read, and yours was just as spiritual as the first song but fewer lines, and that's harder to do.
    I really enjoyed this poem and I'm definitely going to look into the rest of your poetry.
    -KonoichiOkami


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    June 13, 2007

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    Oh yes...fumbling towards ecstacy indeed...this is another one of your precious deep and endearing poems. How it speaks to those who know the name of grief.


  • PageTurner
    June 13, 2007

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    Your writes are so beautiful and profound. I could read them all day!
    Anyways, I usually get a useful message from your poems, this time is no different...

    "always learning
    that to linger
    in the savoring

    might lessen its sweetness
    & so I softly let it go

    until it holds me close
    once more.."

    I am having trouble with the letting go part
    ...but I'm working on it.

    Excellent penning, Scribe!


  • soulfultia gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    This was beautiful Missy, loved the wonderful soft flow, words whispering me to follow, just a Beautiful penning and my pleasure to read your talent ~Tia

  • verses on flesh
    June 13, 2007

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    I've been so out of circulation, and not keeping up with writing, my own or others. I sometimes forget my passion for it, or that there are others who have just as much.

    Your words ring so true in so many ways. To cling is to bring stagnation and to forfeit the beauty of the next experience.

    Wonderfully expressed and an excellent choice for inspiration.

    You brought it into more a zen like concept where as the song, to me, always seemed like a coming to terms.

    You've always had a gift for knowing where and how to break a line to make it stay with you. This write is no exception to that.


  • Nature Song silver member
    June 12, 2007

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    So I will let it go, until it holds me once more!

    Breathtaking words this poem brings forth. Softly in a whispered tone as only you can bring to life. Good luck in your contest. ~Sie


  • Cannonsfire
    June 12, 2007

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    You have one hell of a heart Lady, it shows in all you write and I can only applaud and wish I was half as succinct as you Love, C


  • Dragons Lady
    June 12, 2007

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    This is beautifully written. The imagery is wonderfully expressed and the flow is smooth. It seems to just whisper from the lips. I love the lines:

    always learning
    that to linger
    in the savoring

    might lessen its sweetness
    & so I softly let it go

    until it holds me close
    once more...

    As if holding on will make it grow less sweet and that by letting it go you can savor the sweetness again later. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.


  • arafura gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    sarah...

    Sarah is one of my all time favorite singers... I am sure she would approve of this!

    Love it!


  • The Fallen Phoenix
    June 12, 2007
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    "& I slide between its edges
    before the reckoning
    releases me"
    Beautiful.


  • individuality gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    poem good a is this
    i am not speaking much lest i be attacked


  • marc creamore
    June 12, 2007

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    Ah . . . so soft and beautiful . . . like the delicate touch of a swan's wing on an infant's face. Sarah would love this . . .

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