I know there are days
when you aren't you
but would I be unfaithful
if I loved you anyway,
even with your head down,
and your glances full of fire,
warning me,
and would I be a sinner,
If I didn't care
that you weren't you today,
being blue,
and would you let me
make you smile,
although
you were not you,
Would you?
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Written August 8th, 2003
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is more than moods i suspect it makes me think of things i do not want to think of
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WOW FLAWLESS
These are some beautiful words. My husband never really knows who he's talking to at any given time. Moody women...What a lovely way to express your understanding
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awesome!
i like it alot!! Very well written
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i like it. the only thing is i dont quite understand it. it is lovely though.
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Very intriguing kind of write, that makakes on stop and think about what is really being said in these lines - think we can relate to those days when someone is off - far away, not really with it at all. Something else is on their mind. We just give them some space and love them anyway.
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great poem. really made me stop and think about these situations. I think everyone who has been in love can relate to these issues. I especially liked the first stanza. I thought it was genuis. Very creative and thought provoking. thank you for sharing. I liked your poem very much. good luck. peace always in all ways. best of wishes to you and yours. thanks again! keep up the great work.
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love at its best!
the first verse absolutely delighted me...made me physically smile, and i read it over and over again...a whimsical, yet poignant expression of love...it is rare that the two meet, and yet you joined them beautifully and originally....i agree,with a previous commentator: not sure about the last question...but this was a wonderful poem. thanks, you get my applause! ~tryst -
and would you let me
make you smile,
although
you were not you,
Would you?
this is awesome. you amaze me with this line. great write. and if you were the right person, yes i would. viyanna r langager -
Forgive me, I rarely understand your poems, but here I go. It's a perfect love, yes? One... undiminished, no matter how many days where one is lost, even barely loving the other.
Perhaps I'm wrong.
Ah well, I understand what I can.
Jade -
wow.. this was great.. such meaning behind it.. short yet complex and straight to the point.. i enjoyed reading it very much.. it has a nice flow to it.. very unique.. very good job.. keep up the great writing
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... yes please ... I need that smile tonight ...
Myra
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The writer who asks questions at the end of the love piece. Isn't it always the way?
I like the first verse, it alone can hold its ground, the rest was just after-thought I feel.
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wow
Awww, Lute. *big hug* Oh what a kind, poetically talented one you are! This hit the sweet spot.
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~ -
You beautifully capture the delicate subtle nuances of love...
Thanks, Maria -
Beautiful
This, dearest Lute, is the ultimate declaration of love!
HUGE SMILE.
Ah - to be loved like this ... with such tenderness, gentleness, even on that not-so-me-days ...
The answer is YES - I would. Of course I would.
Myra
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Oh, Lute. The essence of Love is understanding, you capture this here...
"and would you let me
make you smile,
although
you were not you"
Accepting its okay not to smile everyday, as long as one is aloud to try and change that. We share love (all love, from friendship to romance and family inbetween) to share joy, we share joy to banish tears.
And this...
"but would I be unfaithful
if I loved you anyway"...
this I take as an admission that to love blindly, and not adjust our love to suit the circumstance...
" would I be a sinner,
If I didn't care..."
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