There is a place.
There is a space.
Where the soul longs
For what has been denied.
There is a time.
There is a place.
Where one finds oneself
In the dead man's land.
Not belonging.
Not fitting in.
Not "One of the Guys".
In dead man's land.
The soul burns
For what it does not have.
Rejected by all.
Forgotten by friends.
A man wandering
In a land not made for man.
Seeing and feeling things
That are not for man.
Not understood.
No one hears that man
In the land of the dead.
The man who wants out.
A feeling of not wanted
Or not belonging.
Wandering the waste lands.
Wondering when it will end.
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Interesting to say the least. The second to last line I'm guessing should be wandering not wondering. Good write
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nice write. There's a lot of meaning in this piece, it really provokes thoughts of the reader. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Ok this is by far your best piece. You have moved beyond irrevelnt subjects and are finally grasping the essence of freeform. You are starting to dig deep inside and find real and true emotions that show throughout your poem. I love the line " Where the soul longs, For what has been denied." It is put buetifully and passionatly. Excellent work, PLEASE KEEP IT UP!!!!!!!!!
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well..I think most of us feel that way once in a while...what I like about your poem is you presented it with clarity and truthfulness...no need to put offensive and trashful words..just simple and direct words that are really coming straight from the heart...I love this sentence so much.."The soul burns
For what it does not have." great piece coming from you!!!
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I think I've spent quite enough time in dead man's land in my lifetime; I know this place well
Very good entry in this contest; thank you for sharing -
Wow. This is great. I love it
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