i just want to love you.
I just want to love you
and never let you go,
hold you here forever
for always and ever more
You chase away my fears,
turn my grays into blues,
My clouds turn into sunshine,
with just a glimpse of you.
I just want to love you
Let me love you!
You love me
just the same,
let my hands rest in yours
let your lips shape my name.
let our hearts beat the same rhythm
let us have but one breath
and love like there is no tomorrow
our love being all thats left
Author notes
for my special someone. forever and for always...
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent Poem
This has a good rhythm and rhyme!Great piece of work!You have great colors to,i liked the butterflies1And,keep the pen in hand!Good write!Lisa k haslett Raytown missouri! -
Promise...sing
The lyrics work well in this composition but perhaps this variation of a theme could move more profoundly if an additional verse added depth to a statement which to some minds might benefit from reinforcing especially as originality.
There appears to be either a contradiction or reiteration between the first verse
"hold you here forever
for always and ever more"
and the final couplet which one feels is the best part of the poem
"and love like there is no tomorrow
our love being all thats left"
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i really loved. it was amazing. in fact im going to tell my bf to read it!
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reminds me of that song by Mario!! lol.
Nice little poem, bit cliched, which is no problem everyone does that!!
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This is a very special piece here..
Thanks for sharing,
I'm sure he's thrilled!
Shine on sweet soul!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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excellent
this is a really good piece. not to much and not to little. only one mistake i think though. second stanza line 4 . i think u meant to say "your" lips not you. Good luck on other writes.
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Very sweet
I think there's a typeo in the last stanza line four "let you(r) lips shape my name"
Very beautiful imagery I love the free expression of feeling in this poem. Not everyone has no problems with expressing there love so liberally and without restriction. I admire that of you. My favorite line was also
"let us have but one breath
and love like there is no tomorrow
our love being all thats left"
Very well written, and I really enjoyed reading it. Well done.
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let us have but one breath
and love like there is no tomorrow
our love being all thats left
This is just a prayer of the God love..an innocent heart of the poet is dipped with the universal yearning for the love..Indeed here I heard a music of the beautiful soul of the poet..this is amzing write..a great poem
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interesting
You have an unique concept of love, which begins to be identified in these lines "I just want to love you...Let me love you!" Perhaps you will expand on this relationship of love being indirectly blocked by the receiver of the love in future poems.
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