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Another day: No word

You
tell me,
you reap
the fruits
of every word
born on my lips.

You are determined
not to bury your dreams
in the land of  “have not.”

Should I ever hang
my hat on the knewel post,
I won’t be leaving come sun.
Until then, I won’t
be lying, there is
a tear next
to my
heart.

11:28
06/12/07
Newington, VA

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  • Evinde
    January 10, 2008

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    A beautiful, sharp poem, nicely presented. Wonderful meanings enclodes in it :] Kepp writing!

    <3, Evinde


    • tomisb
      January 10, 2008
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      Thanks for sharing the precision of your vision. I appreciate you taking the time to comment. Love, Tom B.

  • restful.soul
    January 10, 2008

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    interesting poem x had to read it twice to check that id understood it correctly but all in all a good read x cleverly presented and nice language used x thankyou for sharing


    • tomisb
      January 10, 2008
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      The chances are that too often we don't realize how much we have until its gone. But, then, too often, we don't have as much as we think we do and are only pretending.

      Thanks for taking the time to read it more than once and sharing what you discovered.

      Peace & LIght,
      Tom B.


  • just mercedes gold member
    January 9, 2008

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    I like this, short, sharp and direct. I like the presentation of the poem as well. I wonder about /knewel/, I've always used /newel/ but that may be another Americanism. I have no idea what the author notes mean. The title suggests to me that he is still waiting for an invitation, I like the idea of "Home is where the hat is".


    • tomisb
      January 10, 2008
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      The author's notes are left overs from an old contest. Knewel is and americanism but I would not labour long over the differences as long as meaning is clear.

      Ah, the hat. When thinking with our head, we find our hat is symbolic of reason and unreasonable wanderlust. When thinking with our heart it is a symbol we toss in to tell the world that we are in this no matter what, even, when we are not sure what it means.

      It is still up to you to create your home no matter where you lay your heard.

      Peace & Light,
      Tom B.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 23, 2007

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    You reap the fruits born of my lips...not to bury your dreams in the land of "have not"...I want be lying, there is a tear next to my heart...Breath takingTo love, to loose love, yet to always love...Just had to come read this one again


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      Love never stops loving. It simply is. We build dreams. Dreams come and go. We carry on. We live to celebrate the love shared and recieved. This does not mean to dishonor the love languished. It is simply mourned and we move on as we must. Celebrate the loves that reflect, refract and grow around us.
      Love Tom B.


  • Cannonsfire
    July 23, 2007

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    If love is never found even though it is spoken of, the thought of being honest with the person rings so softly in this, you cannot change the way a heart feels even if it is never returned. That is how love goes. Love, C


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      One cannot tell anyone anything, only exspose, show the feelings within. Love never gives up hope. But we learn to accept living with the reality and move on. Love, Tom B

  • Apparition
    July 23, 2007

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    Well done.

    Some of the best inspiration for poetry is the poetry of a friend. This has a touch of hopeful beneath a touch of concerned. It is charming and straightforward leaving no room for doubt as to your message.


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      Thank you for your kind words. To love is to never give up hope. Wisdom is, perhaps, to accept the light of hope into your life and not turn blue holding your breath for something to happen that you have no control over.
      Love, Tom B.

  • darrylblacksr
    July 23, 2007

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    This could be heart wrenching in which I can relate to this very well. My favorite part is: Until then, I won't be lying, there is a tear next to my heart. I sense a feeling of longing and loneliness and that of want... I thank you for sharing this poem with me.


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      Recognizing where the heart is doesn't always match up with where the reality is. I wanted to catch that. The pain, the dream and the reality followed by acceptance. State the feelings like the facts they are and leave it at that. Thanks for all of your kind words.
      Love, Tom B.

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 23, 2007

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    This truly is an exquisite piece.  So much emotional depth provided by wonderful word choice. I have to admit, it is nice to get the sense of aching and longing from a mans perspective. Truly a splendid poem. Thank you for sharing.

    Bella


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007

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      Thank you, I have already spoken so often about this in other replies. I think it is rare that any of us are able to be emotionally honest. We are not taught to deal with feelings of regret and grief. It is hard to recognize we must let go and accept. I have moved on, but the love never dies.
      ~ Tom B.


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    July 23, 2007

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    While I'm not familiar with the poem from which you drew inspiration..I believe this is truly beautiful...
    A very powerful write...full of emotion..if your goal was to capture the essence from the mans point of view..I believe you have done that..smiles
    Best wishes with this write..
    Peace
    ~A~


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      Thanks. I wanted to write one that had no bitterness, touch the regret and the promise without whining. I think this poem succeeded. Feelings when real don't need words to prove their validity.
      Love, Tom B.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    July 22, 2007

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    Until then, I won’t
    be lying, there is
    a tear next
    to my
    heart.

    this is so very heart breaking. i like the way you place the tear next to your heart rather than within it as it gives an entirely different meaning. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie


    • tomisb
      July 23, 2007
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      Whooci had a contest, I read the poem and for me this is the ache I would feel. You are right the tear next to my heart says that love is never over, never leaves.

      Weakness is not feeling. Weakness is being afraid of feeling. In this poem I wanted to speak from strength. Thanks for letting me know I succeeded.

      Love, Tom B.


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 15, 2007

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    Psssttt! Take me out of the categories of spares, cause this certainly is not. Remeber when we talked about what splendid write of yours I can grace MY page with, well i found it...TY so much for entering and Best of luck...I am speechless......


    • tomisb
      June 15, 2007
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      It is in a new list. I am honored. This was truly inspired by your poem. Otherwise I would never have thought of this Glad it provides Love Tom B


  • ennovy silver member
    June 14, 2007

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    Heartfelt Words

    Full of real feelings. This read reached inside my soul and spoke to me. If this person ever gets started there's no turning back the hands of time. Deeply rooted in love, and I know this person has been in pain before....But never again! Excellent as always.......................novy

    "If you have ever been in these shoes, this write would bring tears to your eyes."


    • tomisb
      June 14, 2007
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      Thanks dear lady, I just wanted to bring home that the feeling of not being able to be there as much as one desires tears at the man as well as the woman.
      Love, Tom B.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 12, 2007
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    This poem flowed like sweet red wine and the emotions are so sincere I love to be able to feel a poem when I read it and you are very good at making your reader feel just what you want them to


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      i wanted it to be a man's side. Pain is rarely one sided.
      Thanks for telling me this touched you. That is the greatest compliment.Love, Tom B.


  • Cannonsfire
    June 12, 2007
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    I think it has smooth balance, and you sell yourself short that you don't do pics well. This is a great take on it. Love, C


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      I meant, getting them loaded up onto a poem. But I will take the compliment. I believe poem should stand on its own two feet. Or at least and Iambic pair. Love, Tom B.


  • poetryality silver member
    June 12, 2007

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    I feel these words. There is a highly emotional range going on here. I like the presentation as well. The words flow as if this is one single thought. You brought Woo's poem full circle. Excellent! I wish you the best in this challenge.



    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      Renee that is a hell of a compliment. I just wanted to catch the full of love and loss from what might be the guys side. The truth always has three sides: my side, your side and what really happened. May we all compete and bring out the best in each other
      Love,Tom B.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 12, 2007

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    I think this goes very well with Woo's poem...I like the format and the straight foreward style, beautiful words, poet.


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      If you only knew how many pages I filled today trying to get something to work. I took Woo's challenge as a gift and a break I am honored to be praised so highly. The bunnies can always live in the garden and only eat weeds.
      Love, Tom B.


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    Liked this shape , the smoothness of the lines and the great way this fits into the theme of the contest. Flowing and filled with sadness.


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      I just tried to do a male's version of Woo's poem. Hopefully, she thinks I succeeded. Love, Tom B.


  • AngelicMistress gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    Beautiful.....

    TomisB:

    As always your words are exquisite and beautiful.

    ...Any way your words are plyed with they always come out PERFECT!

    I am very proud of reading your words every single day.

    Be blessed dear sweet poet with love and light always....

    Forever,
    AngelicMistress...Tanya


    • tomisb
      June 12, 2007
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      You touch my heart and are too good for my ego. I can only thank you for making your mentor proud with the many beautiful poems you write. Love,Tom B.

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