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"My essence stayed with you!"



As i look back over my life
i see, the loving, happy
wife i use to be

nearly thirty years ago
this perfect life
would be mine no more

losing the love of my life

would close that door

i've walked through life
since that day
the real essence of me
in your grave

was buried away

many nights i still lie awake
think of the family trips
we use to take

a loving husband
an understanding father
the perfect son
you were something special
to everyone

i turned from your casket
my body walked away
but the true essence of me
stayed with you anyway!

Author notes

This poem so opened the door s to my soul!!!! I know we think a lot alike but this is scary. It's as if you had a window to my soul.

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  • Whoochi gold member
    June 16, 2007
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    Oh my friend Joyce, this is extremely emotional and the loss pierces the page...I am so sorry you have had to experience such grief; what a true treasure you are to me.....this is beatiful in its own right...ty always for sharing your life experiences with me and ty for entering my contest! Good luck!

  • Aurora Ceres
    June 14, 2007

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    The depth of your words is so very touching! I see what you mean by your notes...you have truly opened the blinds of the window to your soul and given us quite the view. I think it is very true that when we lose someone so close to our hearts, someone that has touched our soul so deeply, that they do, in fact, take a part of us with them, or we give it, either way, it is not something we have much control over. This really moved me beyond words to be quite honest with you. Only in the best of ways though and, I thank you for it! Wonderful work.


  • SeaWithYourHeart
    June 12, 2007

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    wonderful

    I loved it. simply fantastic that is exactly how i felt when my grampa died. we were so close that a part of me died with him. Thankyou it is perfect.


  • Kappa Pyua
    June 12, 2007
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    deep

    this is defenatly heart felt by lots i'm sure. so far i have never felt so close to anyone i know. the closest i come is when i had no choice but to put my own dog down when she was 10yrs old. Good luck in ur other poems.