Faked facts in this realms
are thus too true.
Minds foretold to be a reality
known to all in an obeyed non-resistance world.
As secretts bound memories of faulse
brain twisted
unrealistic
master-fold reunions of the rich and fabulous.
Sensations medicated
reconstruction anticipated.
Manipulated...
All too turned around from freedom
in a time that is fully tuned to need it.
Please tell me what you think
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An amazing poem.. I especially love the last two lines.
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very good
very interesting literary technique you used to portray a "reality" by utilizing a negative connotation to it
"perception"
an everyday event such as someone having their shoe untied can be
"Sensations medicated
reconstruction anticipated.
Manipulated..."
hundreds of times by each person passing him on the street
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Intresting
Very intresting, sounds like there a storie being told them again it sounds like a war within one's mind.
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the social commentary in the end of your poem is very dead on. It's like all the things people once did for a sense of freedom, people do now, with not quite the same effect. The first part is kind of lost on me. it all flows very nicely though and i enjoyed reading it. not too long or too short.
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I like the style you choose for this write. Any other way I'm not sure if it would work the same. You did a great job conveying your point~ Good luck in the contest!
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very deep, feels very beat. nicely done.
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Wonderful couplet in my favorite style:
Minds foretold to be a reality
known to all in an obeyed non-resistance world
Congratulations. Thank you for entering the contest.
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Rock on, freedom writer!
Your words are so true.
We are surrounded by false realities on a daily basis.
Good word usage and flow...
Great write.
hugs,
Steph -
nice i like
many fake facts...lost freedom so true...had to read twice ...but it really holds true ...it makes me think of faked facts from the government...and how now we are at war....great job...peace katie
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