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Beautifully Scarred

I knew this time it was just different somehow,

his voice was much softer, that tilt of his brow.

The pain of his heart beat strong as mine,

I tried to refuse to see it ...but I knew the sign.

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It would be the last time we shall embrace,

it was written in every single line on his face.

I could say nothing as his last teardrop fell,

that moment of silence put me under its spell.

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As I reached out I completely froze in my tracks,

our forever love had faded into life's cracks.

Many years passed since his voice "So caressing"

whispered to me, You'll always be my blessing.

 

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I used option #1

*(I CAN STILL REMEMBER JUST THE WAY YOU TASTE)*

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  • Temptation.
    July 21, 2007
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    ooo! this is sooo good! i love it. thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 15, 2007

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    This was incredibly beautiful. It had a soft flow to it..almost like a kiss. I just loved it..
    Good luck in the contest.
    Soulful Woman


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 15, 2007
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    PS....OMG I forgot to mention how the pic enthralled me and held me hostage for a few moments....love it...I want it on my page??

  • Whoochi gold member
    June 15, 2007
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    Always graced by your words, feels like they just fall upon my shoulders....you have taken my words and turned them into a gift here...always sadness when there is a loss, but one has to be grateful for what they did have....Always loving your work, a special treasure that you entered and wrote this stunning piece....Bravo! TY and best of luck!


  • Laura
    June 14, 2007

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    ohh this is wonderful the imagery is outstanding suiting the picture perfectly very well done and good luck in the contest you have entered xxx


  • Quiet places
    June 13, 2007
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    Brilliant Write!

    A combination of love and sadness of loss and rememberance of a last meeting before fate takes it's turn. The imagery and emotion in this poem is outstanding!! The well chosen words send sivers up my spine in thoughts that it could be me as one of the players in this game of life. So well done that I can feel it in my soul. Great job my friend, Don


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 13, 2007

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    you know i think this poem is amazing, i just was knowed down while sitting as i read this, keep it flowing, and good luck in the contest, you always humble me with you work, i like that


  • truembrace
    June 12, 2007

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    this poem was written perfectly - heartfelt verses, smooth in its form, perfect perfect sentiments.

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