Shimmering pools of fire
Sensuous
Caressing
Gliding over your skin....
Glowing
Burning
Leaving no where untouched....
Yearning
Wanting
Then you are gone...
Empty
Alone
Desolate...
Leaving only a memory
Fading
Gone
Forever....
Nothing but a dream~
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Written August 8th, 2003
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lovely...simply lovely.The soft sensuality of this is great.Soft and yet firm at the same time.Great write.Loved it.Blessed be
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Ok I have found the place I wish to be and that is in that breathtaking picture.The picture alone has pulled me in so deeply.A wonderous write that has me looking deep inside and realizing this is where I live and hide. A dream world made of fantasies.....no reality, just so perfect just my place.
I love this piece!
Wonderfully Written!
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ohhh, the fast pace of this made me want more
lol, very nice techique susan i liked the picture too, fit very well with the poem
gosh i can't get over how fast that poem went by...like wow, it was like "wow, i'm done already" and it totally made me want to read more
good job susan, off to read the rest
kayla* -
Again, the words flow in unison with the picture. You do fantastic work. I just hope I can write a poem about you that can elevate to such a high standard as you have set.
Jim aka ThePoetAmuse -
breath taking
ohhh this almost took my breath away, the flow was just as a dream. beautifully written hun, i love the entire poem, most times i have a fav. stanza of the poem, but in this case, it is so well written and flowy that i love it all. and the picture that you have posted with this poem is as breath taking as the poem. t/y for writing and posting this hun. ~Julzzz~ -
ur pics are just perfect!!!! love em all, but even without them you create the visuals w/ur words. PS dreams do come true when you least expect them too....hold onto your dreams!!!!!
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Wow...the pic really matches this poem! Very cool!
Well....I've got a Bic lighter....and lips! :-)
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I know I commented on this one before.. seems lately AP is driving me crazy with losing them!
This was... perfect! From the gorgeous picture... to the beautiful flow of your words.
I loved it!
hugs..
Mary Ann -
beneath the sheets that hold all of nights stories many chapters are revealed and some hold entire sections that are empty or only hold the word one...but even there an abbreviated form of ecstacxy can be unpenned for a brief time...artis
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Intriguing picture............. I love to dream.. Which explains why I love to sleep.. Which probably explains why I love writing poems! lol.. the poem explains perfectly how dreams can be so exciting and full of "feeling" and then *poof* gone... but you do it so simply and elegantly... nicely done!
I am truly taken by the pictures you post... I find my own types of pictures that do that for me too, but yours are always so different and full of color.. And you categorize them perfectly with each poem! WONDERFUL!
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EXCELLENT
Breath taking poem ~ Wow , where's the ice cubes !! HeHe
I saw your bio page , your 47 ???? Wow , You look very good !! Not to worry , I like men ... LOL !!
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A simple, well-worded poem that I think most of us can relate. Beautiful poem.
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May have been just a dream, but it sure sounds like it was a good one. Beautiful poem. Very soft and lovely.
Lee -
i could totally relate to this one as well...it's strange to me how you can have dreams. beautiful and meaningful dreams..and wake up and not remember anything about it...but yet it was so real. I think i will write a poem about it
excellent poem! luv*Amanda
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ahhh... but if we dream it, in most instances... might it also not be something that just may come true. After all, does not everything worthwhile start out as but a dream
Nicely done susan. (I think there was one word up there such as no where... that needs to be nowhere- just a small tech sort of thing, but it might read just the slightest bit/tiniest bit more smooth as one word. As two, it caught my eye more than it should)
Regardless, a great job in capturing the smooth ripples of dreams and hopes that truth may lie therein.
Kimmie -
awww, now I feel kinda sad... another amazing poem, Susan... There is such longing in this piece... its beautiful. Ah, I want someone to hold me and carress me now, lol.
I don't know where you find these amazing pictures, but, as always, it fits the poem perfectly...
Wonderful poem, hun
-Heather -
Just look at that fabulous picture
doesn't it just make you want to melt into
a sea of dreams where love always stays
and love never goes away
Just beautifully sad this piece is
Wonderful job on this Susan!
Love to You hon* Always Mina 
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Very deep, I liked this piece so much, I really missed reading your stuff, but it's all my fault
anyway I'm back again YAHOO
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Amazing!
Wow, this was amazing Susan I loved it! The imagery was awesome I felt every word! Very well written Yet another masterpiece of yours!
James
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"And then came the dawn..."
whisking away all the vestiges of the glorious images in your wonderful dream. Life can be so cruel!!! Loved this! Sensual, sad and dreamy!
< 3 Maureen
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Susan
OOOOOOOooooooooooooooooh La,la, such a dreamy and divine picture
Beautiful write, as always, from your loving heart, written in true Susan~Style, Sad but uplifting at the same time
Hugs and Love ,
Karen
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awesome
Holy crap! this is the most amazing short poem i have ever read. This was beautiful, it really touched my soul. Thank you for posting this where others could read it. -
Susan a beautiful mesmorising picture and the words are as if you are speaking them aloud . There are times when our dreams have to sustain us , so never stop dreaming and writing
much love
Reenie
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Damn... just a dream.. ahh well.. waiting for the next one to come along.. nice write Sis.. liked it alot :)
~GILL~xxx -
Well susan, this is certainly another great write from you, m'lady!
your words conjured up some incredible images, i must say...
wonderful wonderful dreamscapes!
blessed be
mike -
Oh wow this is beautiful, don't you just love those dreams. It's sad when you wake up though. Beautiful write.
Red -
Grabs her pillow and hopes for such a dream to touch her mind...
Only lasting forever!
This is absolutely gorgeous. Very simple write that opens up all kinds of thoughts. Very sweet and somewhat sensual.
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Sigh... yeah... I know this feeling... too well. So happy at night, only to wake up and find it wasn't real... great write.
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Great, Susan!!! Short, sensuous words strung together to create your story in a very strong way. Love your style...:*
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great read
YOUR POEM WAS INCREDIBLE. IT MADE ME FEEL WHAT YOU WERE SAYING.TRULY BEAUTIFUL.I LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE OF YOUR WORK.THE PICTURE REALLY ADDED TO IT AS WELL.KEEP ON WRITING.I ALSO HAVE A COUPLE POEMS PUBLISHED.I HOPE ONE DAY TO HAVE MY OWN BOOK OF POETRY AS WELL.GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR DREAM...
Tammy33 -
Hello Susan,
So beautiful yet filled with tender heartbreak emotion of dreams that once seemed to be that now doesn't remain from whats lost..You expressed the pain of lost love rather well. Hugs,Sherry -
Very sensual, enticing and hypnotic.
The energy within the vivid imagery
pulls me under and makes me feel like
there was something ..yet it's gone now.
Lovely, Sus. -
i really enjoyed this piece. there's a lot of visualization when i read it. dreams can be wonderful, but it seems like such a disappointment when it's over and reality settles in. good write
-disturbed -
Wow... The picture first grabs you and then the sweet flow of the words caress and wrap around you.
Quite a sensuous feel to this one...
I loved it. too bad it's only a dream... but lately..I will take a dream over nothing. LOL
Great work..
Hugs..
Mary Ann -
Oh ... But Susan, this beautiful dream lasts FOREVER ... Believe me, it does ...
Within memory ... within Eternity ... our dreams are recorded from moment to moment, with care and intense love.
Wonderful poem, even though I do not agree with the conclusion.
And I simply adore your backgrounds, always done with such flair.
Take care & Love,
Myra -
ohhhh now I'm sad.... the perfectness gone... *sighs*
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Those that seem simple can be so complex, a lovely feeling drifting on the clouds that are dreams..
Lovely pic again, love the artwork, you know that..
M. -
This poem says much more than it appears to (if that is where you were taking it) I really, really like it. Just...great.
-Raven -
so simple but says so much. This is great and the picture fits it so well...Where do you find these pictures and how in the world do you come up with these wonderful poems.. You must have one hell of a muse... Great write Susan, i loved it.
Lynn -
whoo hooo hun, this is one of my faves for sure. I love the style of it, leaves so much room to visualize. great and beautiful piece. bravo!!
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Indeed, just a dream, a very beautiful haunting one.
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I am standing up and APPLAUDING this piece. Such wonderful visuals and full of emotion for just only a dream.
Yvonne
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