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the One

       
I know she knows it
Deep down,  her heart sings it
Fom everything she wears
To the drops of her tears
She knows, we pair

When we first met
A handshake fluttered my heart,
she  stared into my eyes, saw straight into my soul,
her scent keeps me going
I know we are good together

Author notes

i'm not good in poetry, but a friend inspired me to do it, i kinda like her but i dont know about much about her, she has no idea how much i like her ......cheers gal!

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  • ventus11
    June 27, 2007

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    umm. very void. a lot of words but you dont really tells us whats happing. After reading we are left in confusion. other than that good job.

    • kollokly
      July 17, 2007
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      thanks

      thanks for the comment, still working on the little skill i have.. thanks man!

  • mama-drama
    June 13, 2007
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    I keep telling you this poem is amazing but you won't listen!You have beautiful rhymes,and the length is good coz it carries a lot of honest emotion that is easy to feel.
    Please edit on the misspellings(fom-from:gud-good)I believe you have the talent, coz even my first wasn't this good.

    • kollokly
      June 15, 2007
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      hi

      hey... where's the option to edit the poem... nimetafuta nikakosa... if u can the edit it for me...