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Distant Tears

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Distant Tears

tenderly talking, that’s how it started
the tips of my fingers suddenly parted
I found myself close to his loving lips
reflection of my love as I touched his hips

In my stained-glass soul I had lost control
the lust seen in his eyes would make me whole
the moonbeam smiles made my heart race
as my desire would dance across his face

chest to chest leaning in for a kiss
whispering sweet nothings of loving bliss
our babys-breath words that’s what occurred
loving whispers that are, all too often heard

"you'll always be the one that I need"
my blessing will be receiving his seed
his gentle touch as a single aching tear
I know that my lust spills over his fear

so now that I hold him and kiss his cheek
he gives me the thrill and relief that I seek
holding hands with him in our walks every day
the man of my dreams took my tears away

 

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Amera Style
This style represents two poems one nested within the other differentiated by the bold print. The inside poem should be read line by line. The inside poem is written by Whoochi

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  • Poetry4all
    June 20, 2007

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    awesome

    lovely poem, v cool form. love these words: 'his gentle touch as a single aching tear/I know that my lust spills over his fear'. great write!


  • Desire gold member
    June 13, 2007

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    Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!!


    Got to market Your Style!
    Amera Style
    Can I try it sometime and of course give You credit!!

    Gorgeous verse You have penned and Love
    the TWO verses in one!!
    Wow!!
    Love the rhyme...Love the presentation!
    Love it

    Many blessings to You in the contest!
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 12, 2007

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    You, my dear friend, just amaze me all the time with your pieces. Where do you find the time to learn all these styles. I loved this..it really brought 2 poems into light, yet never took the spotlight away from either one. Loved it.
    Soulful Woman


  • Hetha gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    How extremely creative! I love this! I might have to try this as a collaboration sometime. The deep and heartfelt words of this piece, are quite moving and sweet. Sad, yet gentle. In my humble opinion, perfect! Bunnies for you!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    Amera,

    One of your better ones technically I'd say, most nice, most. Very nicely done little cubbie of the forest dark..




    dad


  • PrincessOfLostHope
    June 12, 2007
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    Wow. Deep love it.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    Wonderful style! This is amazing. A masterpiece you have created in combining the poems this way. Very impressive. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    This is a lovely piece of expression with a very subtle rhyme scheme and the extra bonus of the hidden poem within your words. Very well crafted indeed. Thanks for sharing. Love ya. La x


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    OMG, this is absolutely on target and cuts to the chase, the heart and guts of it..love the style, you will have to show me, love how you took my own words and blended them in...and this ended on such a happy everlasting note..I knew you would find a "positive" in it...Best of Luck! TY for entering...


  • PerVirtuous
    June 12, 2007

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    Wow. Brilliant. I am spellbound. To take a poem and embed it in another poem is not a skill easily learned. One must have a natural brilliance for that. I have tried to do it and come up with lame crap. Fantastic. Three bunnies!


  • bedovich
    June 12, 2007

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    oh amera princess dear:S this is so sweeet. heart breaking too:S:S i love it alots dear good lucks in th contest

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