I remember back when you were online
It's been forever
Like the longest time
Back in the day, I knew you were mine
Part of you has disapated
I, myself don't know who I am
Without you, staying up is hard
I feel like I can no longer stand
Things were easier
And you made me feel complete
We talked of anything, and everything
I helped you cool down with the heat
My heart's there in New Zealand
Until we truly meet
May it be Here or Heaven
Until we face within our two feet
I haven't heard from you in ten days
I hear my surviving sobbing cries
And my soaked pillow case,
That was embedded of my eyes
Jeremiah, when you can
Talk to me
Any way, shape or form
As long as you can reach out to me, it doesn't matter if it's from the norm.
Our friendship was once simple
But obviously it's gone real deep
All I ever did was try to help him
I don't want this to be how ends meet
God, I want him safe
Let him rest in Heaven
It's I hope I hear from
When central time goes eleven-eleven
I'm not going to stop praying
To say the very least
My heart's there in Christchurch
It's there to stay, for him to keep
God, please take care of him
Becuase I can't do it myself
Lord, forgive for all the wrong choices I've made
This is who I am, I can't be anything else
Forgive me for my misfortanes
And how I claim I live in pain
You showed me what suffering was
Now that I know, part of me feels insane
God, please. I can't urge you enough
PLEASE keep after his soul.
When I die, I want to meet him at the gate
So, then again, my heart can become whole
♥
Author notes
For your username. I would go with:
"Never Fall in Love"
The reason I suggest this, is that it sounds more professional. People that may not know English might understand it better. But it truly depends on what type of label you want to give yourself. Good luck judging your contest.
And by the way, I put my heart into this. If you don't want it, or wasn't the type of love poem you wanted, or thought I was too wordy in General (and excuse that one capital letter) just take it out of your contest. Thanks.
I thnk this contest is over... but still there is a story to this. I don't write love for nothing. I prefer dark as well. #1: How would you explain to someone how deeply you are in love so that they understand?
On April 8th my life changed. I remember I wanted to read something of extreme suffering. It was on here. And I came across a bulletin. Treated it as a poem anyways. It was a kid reaching out. I started talking to him as a guidance concelor type of thing. His father seriously abuses him to no end.
We started getting feelings for each other...one day [July 26th 2006] He was stabbed in the chest by his dad. I thought he died that day...I prayed 11 hours straight. He made it. His parents are divorced. He's the middle child of 2 other brothers [making him 2nd of the three].
I haven't heard from him 10 days, I'm scared...can you blame me?
I have never loved someone so much. I know, I know. It is online. I have known him for over a year. He beleives I am the only reason he gets through everything. He means so much to me. He is amazing too. I would do anything for him. I'm 16 and he's 15. And I'm getting him out of there when I turn legal. I hope everything works out... I think he would be the greatest guy I have ever met, or could meet. He's the closest thing to a soul mate I have ever known.
Do you think long distance love really last and happen?
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"May it be Here or Heaven
Until we face within our two feet
I haven't heard from you in ten days
I hear my surviving sobbing cries
And my soaked pillow case,
That was embedded of my eyes"
There are a few spelling errors here but the entire piece is amazing so it doesn't annoy the sivers out of me. ((Holy hell I nearly flew across the room in the computer chair
)) This is truly a modern twist on love and relationships, and I loved it for that. I can relate, not quite 100% but I CAN relate. And I'm sure that it's not only me who can. 
Just take care and remember that yhou're heart is stronger than you think. He'll be fine and so will you
Bandaid.
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caring, sweet heartfelt.
My prayers are with you and him both. This is a awesome heartfelt poem. Things will work out for the best but my prayers go out to the both of you take care
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thank you so much for your comment and prayers. i recently got my power back feoma bad strom... I hope i can be with him soon.
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You know, this is probably a very good love poem ... It's hard having long distance relationships and that's why I never wanted to be in one myself. Not saying that I don't like my ap boyfriend .. I live him and .. it's more than just the surface .. But I'd ve way too insecure about that.
Reading it .. I really liked this ... it did dissappoint me when you brought up God in this. I respect your beliefs .. it's nothing like that .. but that's where I stopped relating. Maybe it's just me .. or even others ... but I think this would have been better without the religious moments.
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awwwww hun
This is sad.
And you're authors note was really sweet when you said that he was the closest thing to a soul mate you had ever known.
awwwwww
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I hope everything turns out.
I loveeee you!!!
and im here for you always!!!
:]
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Brandee -
Awwwwwwwwww!!!! It's truely wonderful that he has someone like you to be there for him!!!! Thanks for entering and good luck!!!!
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absoltuely beautiful. Friendsship is something we all cherish, and i have a friend on here, who lives in Idaho, i new jersey, and we are the closest we could be. Forget the distance, mountains and rivers cannot defien love, rather the emotions we feel, and the cherished memories we have. This is a strong testament to that.
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Keep praying for him as I know you will. It sounds like he has had a rough life caused by his father. I know it will help him knowing how you care for him. Everyone needs someone like that in our lives. I'm very proud of you how you do try to reach out and help others the way you do.
Ted E
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Aww so sad! I know you miss him, but there's nothing you can do really except pray and hope he's ok. If I could I would go to New Zealand and bring him back to you!
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Yes, I will pray !! And, yes.. I would be worried too. May God bless him and keep him always.. and you too dear one. Truly your heart is a good one.
AND, this is an swesome write.
God Bless.. Debby
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Thank you Debby.
Thank you for your kind words. Today makes it 11...but who's counting...(yeah, like not me, okay, I confess I'm guilty.) Thank you.
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awww sweetie this is so sad. i am sure that he is fine though, you cant worry too much. even though i know its hard, just keep making them 11:11 wishes bby they gotta come true.
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this is amazing btw
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...Nickole...
I do, am and pm...you know i pray on it. Thank you for reading it... I know you were recovering from JD's
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this ,mademe all teary eyed i cant believe some one would be like that to a child, their own even... i am in consent prayers to any go who would listen to me for him
thanks for shareing
~~Chef W.B.
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Ahh hun this already brang tears in my eyes. It is very very sad poem...I do HOPE he is good too. I'll keep him in my prayers.
Keep writing and God Bless
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I'm sure he's ok. Maybe he's just really busy and got caught up in the things around him. You should't worry. It will be alright.
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be strong my love ,i know that he will contact you as soon as he is able, he has been through so much but he is a survivor.. it is hard when we are seperated by the miles but things do have a way of working themselves out, just words my love but so very true. i will keep him in my prayers
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