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Vampire Kiss

I became an immortal slave to you so long ago
The distance between us was a fate I did not know
Now there is nothing left in this life for us here
But soon we will have nothing left to fear

I want to escape from the mortality that keeps apart
Your pure soul from my unbeating heart
And there is a way that we can be together
But I warn you that it will last forever

If you believe that you’ve the strength to hold
This body that will be eternally cold
Then you can have me if you can accept this
So come closer and release all your love
To one who kills as many as in heaven above
Then let us lose our souls in the vampire kiss

You know that this world is such a cruel place
That compared to it I am the only peaceful face
Even with the stolen blood inside my veins
I am held down by none of this world’s chains

I promise that I have a way that you can be free
A freedom that will last for all eternity
But without it I cannot stay with you
For except killing what more can I do

If you believe that you’ve the strength to hold
This body that will be eternally cold
Then you can have me if you can accept this
So come closer and release all your love
To one who kills as many as in heaven above
Then let us lose our souls in the vampire kiss

I want to have you forever in more than just lust
For I only want a love in perfect love and perfect trust
And if you want me to go I will just let
Me give you a single kiss so that you never forget

If you believe that you’ve the strength to hold
This body that will be eternally cold
Then you can have me if you can accept this
So come closer and release all your love
To one who kills as many as in heaven above
Then let us lose our souls in the vampire kiss

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  • Werewolf Avarus
    May 18, 2008

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    Thank you for the entry it was a powerful write and there was a flow to it.
    One thing though could you please go back and read the rules, thanks.

    And good luck!

    'Wolf


  • BittersweetPhantasm
    April 5, 2008

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    this is a wonderful write. i love the story behind it, and that the vampire within it is so, well... loving
    when people think of vampire they generally do think of the darker side, i feel. i like to hear this kind of thing every once in a while.
    thank you and good luck


  • Selene Tremere
    March 12, 2008

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    WONDERFUL poem I loved this! amazing job
    really good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    January 18, 2008
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    Wow this is fantastic, just fantastic, *speechless*


  • Rinoasis
    December 15, 2007

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    I like this part the most:

    "And if you want me to go I will just let
    Me give you a single kiss so that you never forget"

    I love poems & stories about vampire-human love. They have an underlying tone of passion.


  • crystallynnbradford
    November 30, 2007

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    wow....this is a great piece and I enjoyed reading it a lot....wow....thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • XxMysticalFantasyxX
    July 14, 2007
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    Really nice!! you did a really great job with this one! you have talent! Thank you for entering this contest and best of luck!!


  • MoonlightBeam
    July 5, 2007
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    This is a wonderful poem, I love it great job


  • Yuki Now and Always
    July 2, 2007
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    Nicely written. I love a nice vampire story. Esp 1 about a vamp and a mortal....always refreshing. good job and good luck.


  • Ignis Corpus
    June 28, 2007
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    i love this poem good job on it and good luck in the contest, i expecailly liked the part that states
    "I promise that I have a way that you can be free
    A freedom that will last for all eternity
    But without it I cannot stay with you
    For except killing what more can I do"


  • Memoirs of a Girl
    June 27, 2007
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    I really thought that the first part of it was good. But then the theme of it repeated several times and the poem should have been over way before it actually was. But it was very well crafted. I would just suggest you slim it down a bit.


  • TheDemonEve
    June 12, 2007

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    WOW. This is convincing. A promise of release, freedom, and redemption in sin. Well done!

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!

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