I'm [[bruised]] && [[broken]]
But I S
T
A
N
D tall
s.h.i.m.m.e.r.i.n.g like the *stars* in the sky.
You were my BIGGEST -obsession-
[[but]] you.were.a [f][a][k][e]
Your .lies.
they stung, like an [acidic poison]
being :shoved: down my throat.
Left {ALONE} in a >>bathroom stall<<
*singing my [fairy.tale] song
:lipstick: smeared across my face
like a -glamorous- fashion statement
after you [[beat me down]] && [[used me]]
my [[[vision of love]]] faded into
the >>photographs<< of us
.s.c.a.t.t.e.r.e.d. across the highway
Author notes
[[option 3]]
A contest entry
- CarCrashHearts;; by MelissahhMidnite.
421 points, ended June 14, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is just around the corner ? by The Hardest Goodbye.
300 points, ended June 20, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything. by Sonofdead.
800 points, ended June 26, 2007, 138 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~*~All Your Dirty Pretty Comes Here~*~ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
625 points, ended December 30, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty by Lj-.
420 points, ended August 2, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice write.
Thank you for your entry,
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I know someone who did this to me... promised me everything, the moon and the stars and didn't even bring a damn meteor back for me. Ah well, heartbreak is a part of life in this day and age more than ever.
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I really really adore this. I can relate. *bookmark* ♥
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This is a great write. It sounds like a great song to me. After reading it I got my guitar out and started strumming a few chords and Kayla (my singer) sang it a bunch of times and I think it sounded great. If you havnt already try putting music to it and playing it in youre band. It has a great sound and feel to it. It is truly a great write.
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I always wondered why people write like that. Apperently, it works for you, so I wont complain. Good luck in the finals.
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For me, writing like that helps emphasize certain parts of the poem. It helps me express things better I guess. But thanks
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This was so amazing. good luck in my contest and thanks for entering =)
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Your .lies.
they stung, like an [acidic poison]
being :shoved: down my throat
after you [[beat me down]] && [[used me]]
these are my fav. parts^^
this rocks
i love it
you expressed so much emotion i really think you are a seriously great writer you have alot of talent and you use it wiselt and this poem is outstanding i love it!! -
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thannkkkk you
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the ending is awesome
its so final && strong
well done
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Nice write!
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Thank you.
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