WALKING AWAY
Trying to find a way to make her understand,
life would be torture without her by my side.
Yet I know that deep down in both of our hearts,
one of us needs to leave here tonight.
I take on that responsibility and smile,
as we both turn around and walk away.
Her to the sofa and I out the front door,
both hearts pounding uncontrollably.
Tears begin to cascade like a waterfall,
slowly they drip down from her cheeks to the floor.
A puddle of tears surrounds her white sneakers,
as she realizes that things will never be the same.
I hear her cry out loudly to me,
as I walk along the sidewalk from her house.
I stop for a minute to take a deep breath,
I know that I cannot allow myself to turn back.
What we shared was very special,
she will remain in my heart as long as I live.
With every breath that I take I pray,
that she will be alright on her own.
Author notes
In response to your poem "Distant Tears".
A contest entry
- Have you had Distant Tears? by Whoochi.
900 points, ended June 25, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Walking Away by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended September 24, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This fits the walking away, as best it could for a prewrite..... it is not quite "far edge+ enoughthough....thank you for your entry.
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Trying to find a way to make her understand,
life would be torture without her by my side.
Yet I know that deep down in both of our hearts,
one of us needs to leave here tonight.... this is a good part but sad it reminds me of how me and my boyfriend broke up in the libary parken lot a month agoe but now we are back together but taking this slow.
What we shared was very special.... everyone should have someone special in their heart thanks for sharing and god bless big brother Jeremy love your little sister dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon
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Well this was a heart tugger! I have read the original piece and I believe you did a wonderful job with your interpretation of the piece. Keep up the awesome work
~tia
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This is so sad but beautifully written. Heartrending and so emotional! It's tragic when love doesnt work out! You have written this so well!
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absolutely heart-wrenching, this is a splenid personal view that is a common thread in my poem..ty for entering ..good luck!
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This ripped out my heart. So sad. Such a terrible thing to have love not work out. Well written. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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