Liquid Tears

Tears,
tearing eyes lashed
into trails,
clear, liquid
emotions pour.

Invisible,
I am invisible
with these tears,
unseen,forsaken
opaque losses.

Turned away,
turned inside out,
you leave, I stay
with these
liquid tears.

Spilling,
split and un-wiped,

love thrown away,
lost to your heart,
embedded in mine.

(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
6/12/07

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Have you had Distant Tears? by Whoochi. 900 points, ended June 25, 2007, 30 entries
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Rosier
June 12, 2007

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Sooooo True.
I am kinda teary eyed. Like my eyeliner is almost running 'cause my eyes are watering.

I love the subtext. It just screams out at me from beneath the words.

Luff XDEEEEE
- Debbysmiles
  June 12, 2007
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  Luff XDEEEEE
  TYa.. didn't mean to make your eye liner almost run ( well, maybe I did ..lol ). I appreciate you reading and commenting. Be well..d
soulfultia
June 12, 2007

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This carries quite a bit of emotion within the lines, sadness and grief, confusion and angst. You allowed us with your wording to feel some of that with you, excellent work! This was well executed and my pleasure to read ~Tia
- Debbysmiles
  June 12, 2007
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  Tia
  Thank you very much ! Smiles ~ Debby
blueyez
June 12, 2007
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I can so relate to this poem! Indeed we are alone in our tears.
- Debbysmiles
  June 12, 2007
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  blueyez
  Thank you.. Some burdens are just fated to carry alone. Blessings..d
Whoochi
June 12, 2007
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Brilliant! TY for enteing..Best of luck...
- Debbysmiles
  June 12, 2007
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  Whoochi
  Thankya !