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my sisters shadow

my sisters shadow is always around
my sister will not leave me
it sometime creeps me out
but i know that she loves me
my sisters shadow seems to pop up
my sister sometimes seems like a guy
but that can be miss persuading
my sisters shadow is always around

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  • SoccerXvida
    June 27, 2007
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    this is deep!


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    June 19, 2007

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    Funny in its own little way! I remember my daughter following an older friend around and her friend got annoyed, then my daughter got older and had a little friend following her around and got annoyed, it was too funny! Is your sister your little sister?

    The contest, though, says you have to enter a poem that has won an HM, I don't see that this poem won an HM? I see it won a bronze, congratulations! But, you may want to enter another one to follow the rules, unless I am missing that it won an HM.

    Write on!


  • Tali28
    June 17, 2007

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    I like the style and the message. Good job. Good luck to you in the contest. Take care.
    Tali

  • cirque du soleil
    June 16, 2007

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    i am very sorry but this poem does not state an option number.also, this poem is most likely option no. 3, in which case prewrites are not allowed. I am going to have to DQ you. perhaps you want to re enter my contest. i'd be glad to have you!
    thanks anyway

  • phoenixonfire
    June 16, 2007

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    This is a very dark qoute with a lot of feel to it..there is a hidden meaning in this write that captures me..great work!

    THanks for entering and good luck!
    hugs n kisses
    preets


  • individuality gold member
    June 15, 2007

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    ah i have 2 sisters and a brother, i am glad i have my own place now lol or i might have to burn their shadows a good poem.


  • Tali28
    June 15, 2007
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    Thanks

    Thanks for your entry. I will be back when the contest ends to give you my comments.
    Tali


  • On Frail Wings.
    June 14, 2007
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    i really do like this one. nice job.


  • heygoo
    June 14, 2007
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    I am sorry, as I must DQ you from Discarded Wads of Paper contest for failure to adhere to rule #5. 5. Include your fragment choice in your author notes.


  • Travis7
    June 14, 2007

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    i think that this is my best poem
    or my second best poem
    maybe the hunt is better
    but thanks for all the coments
    thanks alot guys
    but ya i know this poem is random and wierd
    but i like it and i think you guys will too


  • I Love My Marine
    June 13, 2007

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    this is really really good dude i like it its cool and dark the backround fits good as well i love the colors but yeah the poems great i hope you keep writting

  • heygoo
    June 13, 2007
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    Obviously I see which line you have chosen, however, could you please edit and paste the line in your author notes. Last rule reminder.


  • LadyOfFate
    June 12, 2007

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    very nice poem.... hmmm, I thought you were a tomcat of the sisterhood of cats... but you aren't... hmmm how troubleing. oh well still good


  • Maybe Anastasia
    June 12, 2007
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    umm yea.. this was really kind of a weird write but good job on it and thanks for the entry.


  • Florida Sunshine
    June 12, 2007
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    Oh its a cat? is this about a pet? You need to enter your option in Author notes please. I thought it was about a real sister. ~ Just clarify.
    Thanks

  • Florida Sunshine
    June 12, 2007

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    This is an interesting write. Seems very deep! Over all I thought it was a good write. Thanks so much for entering my contest, I hope you had fun.

  • star wars fanatic
    June 12, 2007
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    I need your author's name, as well.

  • star wars fanatic
    June 12, 2007

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    Okay, I'm assuming your sister is a cat? Otherwise, this poem has nothing to do with the contest, so...get back to me on that.


  • Abidoodle333
    June 12, 2007

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    interesting...
    thanx for entering
    Good luck
    Abidoodle

  • heygoo
    June 12, 2007
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    It seems almost that your sister's shadow is haunting you like a ghost. Definitely not what I had in mind for the line...but that is the point of this contest isn't it... Obviously I see which line you have chosen, however, could you please edit and paste the line in your author notes. Thank you for entering.

  • underestimated1
    June 11, 2007
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    this is interesting wut do u mean "my sister sometimes seems like a guy" lol

    • Travis7
      June 12, 2007
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      because in the contest it gave something you had to write about and one of them was my sisters shadow but i based it on TAYLOR

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