I remember the last time we met
And as you gazed at me,
I could see pain and suffering in your eyes.
Even though,
You said that all was well
And that there was nothing to tell.
But babe…
Behind those eyes and deep within
Lies a pain so deep and wide, my friend.
The turmoil is churning so deep and dark;
Rolling violently at times
As you fall to pieces behind those eyes.
I can't pretend to know how you feel
As you deal with all the worry and clutter of your life
And all the pain that you have bottled up inside
And all the things that can't be denied
As you fall to pieces behind those eyes.
I worry and wonder about you.
Because you are so precious to me.
I sit and think of your sweet smile
And the talks we've had
And all the hugs we've shared
That showed how much we care.
But when I gazed into those sweet brown eyes
I saw a pain hidden deep inside.
It was whispering to me out of fright
'Cause it can't believe all the lies
As you fall to pieces behind those eyes.
I know that you're the captain of your ship
And out to sea is where you'll steer her
Wafting through the briny deep.
Upon the waves is where you'll wander;
While treading the rocky shoals of life
While the rough and tumble sea is your pain and strife
As you fall to pieces behind those eyes.
With all my love
I'm reaching out to you
To hold you up and pull you through
As you fall to pieces behind those eyes.
It would be so easy to just let go;
To let all the sorrows overflow;
To give up the fight
And let it all slip away into the dark of night.
But, my friend, you're a survivor
And so am I.
You said so yourself...
Even though,
You're falling to pieces behind those beautiful eyes.
Author notes
This is what I would be saying to her... She seems to almost be falling to pieces in the pic. I hope you like the poem.
A contest entry
- Tell Me Her Story (picture inspired) by BeautifulFlame.
800 points, ended June 13, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A friend that hurts by FreeFalling911.
540 points, ended October 26, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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good
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Thank you. I'm glad that you liked it. I actually wrote it for a friend of mine who was going through a rough period in her life. I really couldn't do anything more than just stand back and pray that everything would work itself out and just be there for her if she needed me.
Take care and good with the judging.
~Donna~
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this is great Donna! i love the part about the eyes. it reminds me of something one of my chem TA's said at school 'panic eyes'. like when you want someone to know that something wrong, but you can't/don't want to say it.
great work.
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Helen,
Thank you. I've seen that look in many of my friend's eyes. The eyes speak volumes and betray the person. You know that something is wrong. Thanks again for reading and commenting. It's good to see you that you are on here again. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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omg Donna this is amazing. your expression is outstanding. i love the flow and the imagry is awesome. your so talented. good luck in the contest..i wish you the best
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Cayley,
Thanks, babe, for the wonderful heartfelt words of this comment. DId you go to the contest and look at the pic? Everyone seems to think that I captured it. So do I.
Thanks again. Love and hugs always, my friend...
~Donna~
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Awesome!
Dear BlueRosePoet8488,
WOW!
Had to go to the contest to catch the picture after reading this - I wanted the total effect, and it's a match!
You've captured so much pain - and sometimes a friend can only be there for each other - I know that I've chosed to weather this out a bit more.
Loved the flow and you've played out the words beautifully!
I wish you the best in the contest!
Tang
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Thanks, Tang,
I appreciate your opinion and you applause. You know I'll be there for you! Thanks again. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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it is good!!
good interpretation of the picture, great idea .
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Thank you. I appreciate your comment and the applause.
~Donna~
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Very Beautiful!
This is a great write , I really could see what you see and feel the hopefulness even in the pain.
Thanks for entering!
~Lisa~
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Lisa,
Thank you very much. I had written this some time ago, but when I saw the pic, I knew I had to enter it. You are most welcome for sharing. Thanks for holding a great contest! Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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