I don't know what to do, or think, or feel.
I am an open book for all to claim.
And here's a pencil-- write on me, you seal
my last resorts, because you write my name.
I wail, I kick, I scream, but I don't know--
I'm just a baby, after all, so small.
Bestow your gifts on me, and I'll forgo
my claim to fame, and sleep before I crawl.
I may seem animated, but I've strings.
They rise up to the heavens, to my start.
And when they say to jump, I find my springs.
I wouldn't do it, but I have no heart.
It is so hard to be another's doll,
And it will be my rise, or else, my fall.
Author notes
THE ULTIMATE BATTLE
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
This is quite the remarkable sonnet, especially considering the age of the author. I think you have cleverly shown this nature vs. nurture debate very well. The entire poem was very well-crafted with perfect iambic pentameter and well-placed enjambment that kept the whole thing flowing. Best of luck in the contest with this wonderful poem.
David Michaels
-
Odd, my page doesn't show any author's comment other than THE ULTIMATE BATTLE. My perception was of an adult deciding that someone else was controling their destiny and therefore giving up.
You did a wonderful job with the poem. Just my mind is off in different directions as I work out home and hobby issues.
John -
-
lol I meant to imply THE ULTIMATE BATTLE as nature versus nurture. I guess I wasn't very clear.
-
-
Well written. I am not sure I like the idea of another writing in my book. I guess that would be fate and I am not partial to following a pre-ordained path to my life.
A good read.
John -
-
thanks for commenting. I wasn't trying to talk about fate by the way, if that's what you got from it. I was actually trying to emphasize the whole 'nature vs. nurture' debate (thus, the author's comment). the "you" in the poem is not supposed to be anything divine, it's supposed to be a parent or outside influences when you're a baby. I'm a little bit sad that you didn't understand... oh no, I did a bad job!
anyway, I'm glad you liked the poem as a poem at least. again, thanks for the comment!
Jen
-
-
bravo
Oh, this is a fine, fine, superb sonnet! I loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
