He lifts me up--
Alive, uncertain and afraid.
Undergirding me with patient breezes
wafting gently, waving softly
teaching me to flutter, hopeful. . .
He pushes me with whirlwinds fervent
forcing me to dream, to be,
to fly the path Creation's call inspires.
He lays me down.
Safe again within his tender wing.
Author notes
Word Prompt: ENCHANTMENT
In a list
A contest entry
- Word Prompt by AliceinPoetryLand.
675 points, ended June 12, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - more quickie prewrites please by DancingRed.
300 points, ended July 14, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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To beautiful for a comment. It fills me with riddles about the background of this creation and meanwhile turns one into a stunning aahhww.
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Congrates,
A wonderful picture weaved within your words!
You've done a very good job here with this Prompt!
Thanks for sharing you, and congrates on Gold!
Much love, Timothy~
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Beautiful, inspiring images. There's mountains of lovely feeling in your poem. Perhaps each line didn't have to begin with a capital - it might have flowed smoother then, I think.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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Fantastic
What a great poem. Truly was enchanting. Congrats on the gold. -
Perfect Imagery~
Such a beautiful piece you have penned within this contest sweet soul, and I appreciate you sharing your talent here. Keep up the great works, and congrates on that GOLD! 
Much love and respect,
Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Excellent
Very well done. A great write and well worth the gold.
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By the grail, this is inspiring! I enjoy the smooth ambience the piece contains. Many of mine are more...realistic in tone, so this airy feel is, well, like a breath of fresh air. The words like "wafting, waving, flutter" are excellent choices in bridging your thoughts with your work. Stay sharp, ~SI
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Wow
No wonder. This is jam packed with meaning... religeous? overtones maybe or maybe the MUSE... Wow, I love the second stanza the alliteration and really just the flow is remarkable and the ending is anything but disapointing. Well rouded write... Congrats again on the gold. -
This poem is so beautiful, it was my favorite out of all the entries, too, congrats on the gold
So enchanting, and the line "Safe again within his tender wing."....ah, sigh, just beautiful!
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Oh so beautiful! Thank you so much for your entry.
Gaylene
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lovely piece, excellent phrasing and flow. Loved it
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Everyone seems to be in love. Great imagery and and a metaphorical fly boy to boot.
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